22:49 – A Countdown to First Death [01:11am]

24 Hours

 

Chapter 8: 22:49 – A Countdown to First Death [01:11am]

Mir POV

One.

 

                His head hits the side.

Two.

                His eyes flicker close.

Three.

                He sinks.

Four.

                I scream.

 

Thunder POV

“MIR!” I yelled, horrified as I saw the youngest of us dive straight back into the water, through the cloud of blood like a shark with a scent. I lunged out with one hand, but he slipped right through it.

“Damn!”

I had to go after him.

“Thunder!” Seungho’s tone was full of warning. “Don’t be silly,”

“Shut it hyung,” I snapped back, worry making me edgy. “Mir would do the same for me.”

And I dived straight back in to the maelstrom.

 

Seungho POV

My head rung, like a church bell struck. 

“Am I…wrong?” I managed to whisper, one hand searching for my head, wondering if it was still attach or if this was all a dream. Drenched, it felt like I was in hell – except hell was that fiery image everyone held in their minds. No. It was a cold wasteland. All who entered was filled with an unearthly chill that started with your mind, numbing you entirely.

I shivered.

“Enough Seungho,” came G.O’s quiet reply. I straightened, shocked. I hadn’t expected a response.

G.O sighed. “You tried to stop him because you don’t want to see him get hurt. That’s admirable. But at the same time that kid doesn’t want to see Mir get hurt. Neither of you are wrong. It doesn’t mean either of you are correct either.”

“So?” my brain was too fuzzy to think straight. I shook it and dislodged a liter of water out of one ear.

“It means,” he said in a gravelly voice. “We wait.”

“Wait?” Was all I doing today mimicking people like a parrot?

“Wait,” G.O looked me in the eye. “Who else is going to hold the doors open for them?”

I blinked slowly and looked down at my hands. Indeed they were frozen on the wooden doors. I scanned the bolts, the structure, the mechanism. If G.O and I were to let go, they wouldn’t fall back immediately. Liar.

But then it struck me. G.O knew I was in no condition to go diving right back in. I was shivering like a blizzard had torn through my body, coldness knew no bounds.

“Someone has to help them out,” said G.O quietly.

“I get it already,” I sighed. “We wait.”

G.O nodded and we both returned our gazes to the murky depths of the water where three of our team mates fought for their lives.

 

Mir POV

Where is he?

Fear pounded through my body, as heavy as an anvil and as desperate as a hummingbird’s heart. So delicate. So prone to breaking.

Where is he?

I forced my eyes open, ignoring the stinging sensation of the water and silt and scanned for my hyung.

Left. Right. Up. Down.

Nothing. Nothing. Nothing. Nothing.

Where was he?!

I felt oxygen running out. No! Time was ticking. But he had to be somewhere?! Why was this water so damn dirty!

Then-

A hand on my shoulder. I spun, slow-motion underwater. It was Thunder, his features unmistakable and somehow gorgeous, even in all of this filth.

I widened my eyes. What?

He shook my shoulder and pointed with his other free hand. I turned. Thirty five degree left, a little down. There!

A shadow – almost invisible. I didn’t know how he spotted it, but I was glad of it. But oxygen was running out. Black spots danced in my face, taunting me. No. I would survive. Joon would survive. We were all going to get out of here!

I kicked down furiously, reaching out for Joon who seemed impossibly far away. Bubbles burst from my mouth.

Losing air…

No!

I clawed forwards, desperation lending me strength. And then the feel of fabric.

Hope.

I clutched it tightly and drew it close. So very nearly did it tear. And then Thunder was grabbing Joon’s other arm and gesturing with his head at the ceiling. I nodded, barely managing it as the spots danced more furiously, a salsa across my vision. But I found him. I wasn’t letting go of him. Not now. Not ever.

 

Lee Joon POV

Warmth. In the midst of this hurricane. In the midst of so much cold. I was remembering something. Something that I should know! The reason why…I was here…

But the water was my coffin. It drowned me inside and out. That bright spot of warmth was fading. And the blackness flooded back.

***

Warm. Too warm.

Fire burning, raging. The force sends him flying across.

It’s a cold, cold night and as he plunges deep into the water, the dark depths are even more unforgiving.

Cold. Too cold.

And he’s drowning. Bright lights pepper the surface which seems so close, but as he tried to swim, something stops him. So close! Why can’t he get there!

Despair. Despair. Despair.

He claws out with both hands. Bound. Tied. Why is he here? Why? When all he did was try to help his best friend! Betrayed, that is the only word that comes to his mind.

The lights are fading. The depths are claiming him.

Damn you, is his last thoughts as the leviathan finally swallows him.

Down, down, down he falls. His hands still reach for the sky above. 

I will have my revenge, he vows. 

 

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annalulz
#1
I'm just rereading this again, hoping that one day you'll decide to update again *cries forever*
annalulz
#2
Chapter 65: I'm screaming omg Fia why why whyyyyy

Bye Mir you lived well. I have the feeling this isn't the last we'll see of him.... we still have the mystery of the coliseum left to puzzle the pieces together, idk why I think they're just appearing in the real world, without the government interfering with the deaths, maybe that's the path they take....

what on Earth is Sanghyun doing??? he doesn't seem completely evil but.... hmmmmm

I hope you can update after your trip, good luck and have fun ^_^
yumzibabe
#3
OMG! Another update!

I have to admit, I'm really behind on my reading but I will catch up!
School's been crazy busy so I haven't been spending much time on Aff but it's nice seeing your updates.
As busy as I am, I get super excited every time there's an update alert as well as the spoilers I'm getting from yours and annalulz's convo haha.

KEEP IT UP FIA! I'm still here and will be back SOON! :)
annalulz
#4
Chapter 64: SO YOU'RE SAYING THE WHITE SUIT JOON MET WHILE IN JAIL WAS SEUNGHO /SCREAMS

but shouldn't Joon have remembered Seungho was the white suit when he got his memories back? or is this one of those 'oops I have to go fix this later' moments?

Holy shiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii-----

I knew it (again) ahahaha. I admit my wish to have Thunder be the wolf was my own biased-ness and wanting him to be bad, but I'm so happy I was right asjdashdialshd

Did he really kill Mir tho? I mean, if they all technically have bodies in the real world, Mir isn't really dead, his data is just lost somewhere right? Unless... dying in the Coliseum truly kills you, but nooooo okay, I don't want Mir dead, bring him back, omg don't let Thunder kill Seungho where is my SeungDoong ansdhadighasda I'm screaming.

Mastermind Doong is so evil TT__TT

BUT WAAAAIIIITTTTTT... why kill them all if he needs them? I mean what's the point of gathering everyone in these Games only to kill them all later? they obviously have something he needs, but wouldn't it be better to have them alive for that? Or does this has something to do with the real purpose of the Coliseum?

WHAT IS THE COLISEUM????
annalulz
#5
Chapter 63: FIA OMG WELCOME BACK I MISSED YOU I MISSED THIS FIC JESUS CHRIST I'M GONNA CRY XD

I want to give a full insight comment but I'm just flailing around from excitement and I don't know what to say. I need to tie this in in my head with the rest of the story first so I'll do that later XD

but omg can I say I KNEW IT even when you weren't sure yourself RM was Rain? I remember you telling me that but maybe I'm wrong. Anyway...

I KNEWWWWW IIIIIITTTT

and I think I was right about Doongie too *insert wolf howl here* hahahaha

but if this is going where I think this is going, the Mastermind behind everything is Sanghyun and I'm feeling his super awesome plan has back-fired on him, so the question remains who is the wolf? who is the ringmaster?

And what in the name of Loki is The Coliseum? there is more to it isn't there? and what are ll these other things Sanghyun knows about the Digiworld. (yeah I'm still calling it that XD)

I was gonna start kicking you about this chapter update but I forgot. But don't worry I'll be kicking you soon for the next one. I am not letting you take a million years for the next update at this point in the game :3
innocent-bystander #6
Chapter 62: The hacking was so intense...
annalulz
#7
Chapter 62: OKAY OHMYGOD WHAT JUST HAPPENED

You updated *cries tears of joy*

First of all, what? Second of all WHAT? Third of all WHAAAATTTT'????!!!

I'm glad Sanghyun could find both his sisters, but damn poor Durami, I honestly hope she can get herself a physical body, but, in the eventual case they go back into the real world, she won't be able to go back :(

And, wow, I wasn't expecting the Christmas Program/Virus to be THAT, and Mir god, he could have killed everyone o.O

Is this how Seungho ended up joining the Ringmaster? I need to check up because I'm really lost on the timeline xD (I will have to reread this again) but by this point, Joon and G.O have already been recruited by the RM? I thought maybe Durami, Sanghyun and Dara could have come up with the Carnival Games and maybe even that Durami was the RM... I still have my suspicions about her but I don't think Dara and Thunder would come up with the games, then again, I don't think Durami would purposefully torture her own brother with the games, so yeah, I'm probably pretty off with that theory... or am I?

I'm glad the Park Siblings could modify the code before Mir killed everyone, but I do have to wonder about his reaction when he sees what happened. I still want Joon and G.O back, give me back my babos TT__TT

Anywayssss, my big question right now is HOW THE HELL DID MIR SEUNGHO AND THUNDER JOINED THE RM? Who is the RM? (sorry for capsing but I'm excited haha, please don't take 1234567890 months to update again ;-;) I did like that little moment where their paths kinda sorta crossed, and ooh Thunder sort of knows who Mir is. Oh wait, this is bad, this is bad bad bad. What if Thunder feels some sort of resentment towards Mir for coding the Xmas program and almost killing his sisters? asjdghasjjasdalsd
annalulz
#8
Chapter 61: okay, omg, I'm dead. Finally a bit of Thunder xD

this part "His body reacted as it
should in times of stress, his
brain sending signals to produce
norepinephrine and cortisol. His
heart rate increased, his
breathing quickened. His eyes
dilated and he could feel his
skin flush" made me feel like I was watching Criminal Minds, or Sherlock haha.

I imagined that the story of the real world would be like that, te pollution and all, but wow, Sanghyun's backstory is so heartbreaking. Are they clones or the product of female and male DNA? (I might be asking too indepth questions for your unplotted backstory sorry xP) but wow, Mir and Doong are sort of crossing paths. And, was that the RM meeting Mir?

The Cryocells remind me if the recuperation chambers in DBZ xD.

And that bit about Dara, that does give hope for Joon and G.O I think. When you told me there were deaths I thought it would be obe of the boys. I guess Dara's death is going to be Sanghyun's bigest motivator, but he only has 24 days, so I guess the games have to happen before those days are over, unless there's no hope for her?

There was something about the timeline of how they were recruited by the RM but I forgot the thought while watching Friends ;-;

I hope you can give us a faster update, gah the MBLAQ tag is dead *cries*