Review by Choco Carnival Review Shop
Revenge or Love?
1. Poster (7/10)
Positive Side: It’s cool. Catchy and great!
Negative Side: Too much bright and it kind of give pains in the eyes. I’m really strict when it comes to posters. So yeah, I’m sorry to say but I’ll give you minus 3 on your poster.
10 – 3 = 7
2. Title (10/10)
Positive Side: Catchy. No errors, so I’ll give you 10.
Negative Side: None
3. Plot (15/15)
Positive Side: The plot’s catchy, interesting and intense. It gives me the excitement to read it. I’ll give you 15 since your plot is awesome.
Negative Side: None.
4. Spelling and Grammar (15/20)
Positive Side: Your grammar’s fine! As I can see, your English is very understandable. I’ll give you 20 on this one.
Negative Side: Just a quick note that a sentence shouldn’t start with an ‘And’ and a ‘But’. There are some wrong grammars about your story, so I’ll give you minus 5.
20 – 5 = 15
5. Prologue/Trailer/Character Introduction (10/15)
Positive Side: Cool, but to be honest, it’s not that much catchy… Designing it would be better.
Negative Side: Design it up for a bit if you want... You know, to make it much catchy, but it’s still up to you.
13 – 3 = 10
6. Flow of the story (10/10)
Positive Side: It’s cool and understandable! I loved it!
Negative Side: None.
7. Overall Enjoyment (19/20)
Positive Side: It’s awesome! I love the story and its flow. If I’m not busy with exams today, I would read it till the end. I’ll finish it once I’m no longer busy~ :3 Cool story and it’s not a cliché! Great! Great! :3
Negative Side: Just design. Upgrade it, if you want.
20 - 1 = 19
Review Remarks:
*Design it up a little bit.
*Make it catchier. Use your creativeness~
*You’re cool and same goes for you story! It’s awesome that even it’s a simple story, your English is understandable~
*Maybe you should change your poster? I don’t know. It’s up to you! :3 It’s just too bright (*^*)
Overall: 86/100
thank you JaeMiYoung for the review ! :)
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poster credits to snowdropshop and sulliveiera if you want to make poster requests for stories, heres the link :) (they have character charts too)
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