Title of Entry: The One That Forgotten

Participant: LilyLOL

Pairing Used: seokai

Judge: layseokris 

Title: 8/10

-If there's a problem in your title, it's probably because of grammar (will talk about it under the grammar category ^^). But other than that, I do think the title's original. Plus, basing on the title, it implies that there's a focus in the fic-which I think is Mr.K 

Storyline: 17/20

-I have a thing for fics which make use of letters and stuffs like that. In my opinion, it gives another feeling that's vintage. And I do think that it's not very often since we're all in a modern period. I don't even know, I just like those things, hahah! Plus, the two remarkable twists in your story! First, that Mr.K isn't Kai but Kris and the second is when Kris is actually an angel, haha!

Grammar: 23/25

-Grammar's fine, except for some very important parts. The first thing Though, there are two possible connotation for this. If your "THAT'S" contracts into THAT IS (The One That Is Forgotten), then your title focuses on Kris-the one who's forgotten (he's the receiver if the action). Meanwhile, if it contracts to THAT HAS (The One That Has Forgotten), then it emphasizes Seohyun-the one who forgets Mr. K (she's the doer of the action).

As for the other aspects, you have inconsistent usage of tenses of verbs. It's really important to maintain so that later on, if you're going to do flasgbacks or something like that, you can use another tense of verb-and so there is a clear line between what's happening at the moment and what happened in the past or what will happen in the future :)

Flow of Story: 24/30

-I like how the story flows like how a small ship sails quietly. However, there are parts that I think must be highlighted or elaborated even more. Usually, if a ship sails quietly in a sea, then it won't experience the "ups and downs of sailing". There's no huge development that occurs because apparently, it just flows quietly.

Bonus Points:

-seokai as main couple (1 Point)

-fantasy as genre (3 Points)

From glamzchic:

-seokai as main couple (1 Point)

-seokai as main couple (Individual Scoring-3 Points)

Total Score from layseokris: 80

Judge: immakpoploverable

Title: 6/10

Storyline: 15/20

Grammar: 23/25

Flow of Story: 25/30

Bonus Points:

-seokai as main couple (1 Point)

-seokai as main couple (Individual Scoring-1 Point)

-angst as genre (3 Points)

From glamzchic:

-seokai as main couple (1 Point)

-seokai as main couple (Individual Scoring-3 Points)

Total Score from immakpoploverable: 78

Scores: 78 Points (Aida) + 80 Points (Anne)

Final Score: 79

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