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Reviewed by Limalemon

Poster: NO!

Description and Foreword:

"Victoria is a 16 year old girl. From a young age, she has been raised in the upmost discipline. To carry out orders, was all she knows. For a normal teenager, carring out order would mean to do the given chored. However, her order's were different. She was ordered to hunt down and kill the person she was assigned to.

When she is finally able to become normal, will she be able to hide her identity> Will she be able to hide her crimes from her newly gained classmates? How will she adjust in a typical highschool? Would it be what she always dreamed for?

Will she be "Normal"?? "

How was that?

Do you like this?

"But i had had enough of this." it should be "But I have had enough of this"

I noticed that you put too many dots. It's kind of seems as if you don't want to write, just dragging it around. Try to avoid putting those. 

For example: No it wasn't.....it was more a hobby......we didn't just kill any people though.. just the ones that were truly bad or had ended up leaving a permanent mark on someones life....

Rather: No it wasn't...it was more of a hobby. We didn't just kill any people though; we just kill the ones that were truly bad or had ended up leaving a permanent mark on someones life.

On a side note, this doesn't make much sense. So killing bad people is a hobby to her? She kills people who leaves a mark in other's life? Good marks or bad marks? Try to explain this a little more. Maybe try rephrasing it. 

Story:

First thing that caught my eyes was the font. As a reader I would say, VERY BAD IDEA! It's too big and you used Courier New as the font. This combination is very tiring for the eye. Less words fits in a line and you lose your interest in reading very quickly. I HIGHLY RECOMMEND changing it to a smaller font like 14 and with any other font than Comic sans or Courier new. 

Technical things aside, the way this story started was very entertaining. It reminds me of some movie or book but at this moment I can only think of Nikita (CW TV) and Ghallagher Girls Series. If you haven't seen or read any of those, DO IT! I am loving the comical vibe in a serious topic. 

I see more of the dots and quite a lot of careless grammatical mistakes. Please do go back and read all the chapters. Almost all of the mistakes are subconsciouly made as you were just writing it rather than pausing and reading what you wrote. Please try to proof read! Other than that I don't thing anything else to criticise. I like this kind of plots. Even though it's not completely original, it's not super cliche like queenka stories. Aff really needs to read other than those romcoms.

So here it is~

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