Losers? Winners? *Shrugs* Who Cares?!

A Fangirl's Dream

*Minho’s POV*

Ten hours. Only ten hours until midnight and then this terrible bet is over and I win! Gosh, I don’t know if I can last ten hours. I’m dying here!!!!

Nicole’s and my bet was almost over, but as the week continued she was making things increasingly difficult. It seemed like her dresses were getting shorter and shorter and tighter and tighter. I was so close to the breaking point.

“Minho!” she said happily as she waddled into my room.

 “What are you doing here?” I asked, trying not to pay attention to her extremely low cut shirt.

“I just thought I’d pay you a visit,” she smiled as she hopped onto my bed next to be. “Your bed is so comfy.”

Her shorts were so short that they practically didn’t exist. She lay down on her stomach, her cleavage barely staying in her shirt and her cheeks peaking out from the bottom of her shorts.

“I need to take you shopping,” I sighed and shook my head.

“Why? You don’t like my clothes?” she asked innocently.

“They’re too small.”

She sat up immediately and glared at me. “Are you calling me fat?!”

“No! That’s not what I meant at all! You just have um… accentuated parts of your body that should be covered-,”

“OMO YOU’RE CALLING ME FAT!!!”

She grabbed one of the pillows and began smacking me with it. However, I snatched the pillow out of her hands and used it the push her back down onto the bed (without touching her).

“You’re not fat,” I hissed in her ear. “You’re frickin gorgeous; do you understand?!”

She gulped and nodded her head. I released my hold and got up. “I’m going to take you shopping, and we’re going to buy you some great clothes, okay?” There was less than half a day left, but I knew I wouldn’t make it. I needed to get her new, more modest clothing ASAP!

“All right,” she answered still slightly frightened by my display of control.

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“How about this one?” I asked, as I took a dress off the rack and held it up for Nicole to see.

“Seriously?” she looked at me with a Yeah-Right expression and kept searching.

“I’M taking you shopping and I want you to try it on, so you’re going to!” I said, draping the dress over my arm. She just rolled her eyes and kept searching.

When we’d finally collected about 10 different outfits, Nicole went into the dressing room. I waited outside on a bench for her.

“Ready?” she called after a few minutes.

“Ready!” I called back. This was going to be great.

When she came out in the first outfit my face dropped. She was wearing this (http://www.cocktaildressesfashion.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/02/short-cocktail-dress-2011.jpg),

“Where did that come from?!” I asked in confusion, turning so I didn’t have to look at the shortness of the dress.

“I wanted to try it on,” she explained innocently.

“Well take it off. Try on one of the outfits I picked out.”

She pouted and stomped back into the dressing room.

Gosh, she looked sooo good in that dress!!!!

“Are you changed yet?” I called after about 10 minutes of waiting.

“I’m not coming out in this!” she shouted.

“Then I won’t buy you anything,” I threatened. Silence followed until finally the dressing room door creaked open and she stepped out. I tried my hardest not to laugh. (http://www.rustyzipper.com/full/179392.jpg).

“I hate you,” she pouted.

“No, it looks good!” I exclaimed, sounding as honest as possible. “I think it brings out the color in your eyes.”

“Very funny,” she sneered and hurried back into the dressing room.

She tried on more hideous more the hideous outfits I’d picked for her against her will. As much as she was hating this, I was enjoying it greatly. (The dress she tried: 1. http://bp2.blogger.com/_ucg7AoWKod8/Rke02KHF4YI/AAAAAAAAALM/uh1AeJrQWwA/s400/4008.jpg2. http://www1.pictures.zimbio.com/bg/Ugly+Betty+Season+Three+Comin+Up+pMJlPA58Ph0l.jpg3. http://4.bp.blogspot.com/-fmT6a1eXd0I/TkwbLM2VIEI/AAAAAAAAAPQ/SDlEHiB5BNk/s1600/IMG_3332.JPG4. http://www.avenue7.com/MakeThumbnail.ashx?height=500&width=500&&file=~/Images/ComboImages/12877306597344875094f31caa-5d18-42b5-86b9-766134915972.jpg&qual=80)   

I finally convinced her into buying this one (http://farm5.static.flickr.com/4137/4924374355_7f86b60f45_b.jpg).

“Well, at least we agreed on one thing,” I smiled as we walked back to the car.

“You mean at least I compromised once for you,” she pouted.

“Hey, I think you’ll look great in it. It’s modest and classy; like the stuff Rebecca wears.”

Nicole stopped in her tracks. “Rebecca?” she questioned, looking at me darkly. “You don’t still think about her, do you?”

“What? No! At least, not that way! I just think her style is nice. I only view her as a friend now,” I answered quickly.

“Now?! How long ago was it that you liked her? Was it while you still liked me?”

Crap! Bad choice of words!

When I didn’t answer (because I was in the middle of thinking^) she turned to open her car door.

“Nicole,” I stopped her in the act, slamming the door shut which made her jump in surprise.

“What Minho?!”

“No matter what happens, where we go, or who we meet, I’ll always love YOU. Not Rebecca; not anybody else! I mean it. I love you for the person you are-,”

“Minho, don’t get all mushy on me.”

“I can’t help it if I love you.”

She bit her bottom lip and looked up at me. Shyness showed through her attempt at a hard expression, making me smile.

“How can I trust that you won’t meet someone else when you go back to Seoul?” she questioned, not as strongly as her last inquiries.

“How can I trust that you won’t meet someone here when I go back? Or that you won’t have a fling with one of your old partners?”

“Minho, I don’t think I could do that even if I wanted to. You’ve changed me. That’s all in the past now.”

“You promise?”

“I promise. But you didn’t answer my question.”

“I have a simple answer for it,” I smiled down at her.

“And that would be…?”

“Because: I’m hopelessly in love with you.”

Like I had told her, it was a simple answer, but it must’ve been enough for her. I noticed her whole face soften and her voice almost purred. “Can I kiss you?”

“You’d be losing the bet,” I said as our faces inched closer.

“You would be too,” she pointed out, her eyes beginning to close.

“Then I guess it’s a lose-lose situation.”

“Or a win-win.”

“Yeah, cause I don’t like to lose,” I smirked.

“Just another thing we have in common.”

She reached up to wrap her arms around my neck as our lips made contact. I cupped her face gently in my hands, caressing her soft cheek. Out of everything we’d ever done, this is what I’d missed the most over the course of the bet. The other stuff… yeah that was great. But kissing my yebo; there was just something about it that made my knees (yes Choi Minho’s knees) go weak. 

 

 

 

*Gahhh my lovely readers!!! How are youuu? I have been reading your sweet comments and you guys make me want to cry! I love you all so so so so much I can't stress it enough. You make me uberly happy c: I'm glad you're enjoying it and I hope you enjoy the rest just as much if not more! There's still a few surprises left, so *sings this part* "nothing's over, nothing's over*. Sorry, just had to make an Infinite reference there. Anyway, I will quit author blabbing and let you go. But again, kamsahamnida, gracias, thank you, komapsumnida, arigato, and all other lanuages c: Lub you<3

P.S. Why do I have the words "Choi Minho, like a boss" stuck in my head? Oh me and my crazy thoughts. That booger is messing up my bias list again! >.<

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Just letting those of you who are wondering that YES there WILL be a sequal to this story^.^ I am in the process of writing it right now!

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EHhyung
#1
Really nice story and I really love it so much
sinebright1095 #2
I love it :)
writerinprogress94
#3
Chapter 6: Second review of the day! Let's do this! Chapters 3-6, woo! (And this is why I shouldn't have caffine...)
I don't think I caught any spelling or grammar errors in the last 4 chapters. There might have been a few places where the wrong punctuation sign was used, but other than that, 9.5/10 on grammar and spelling.
I feel like there wasn't as much description in the last four chapters, but there was definately more dialogue so it balanced out. 8.5/10 on word choice.
Your sentence structure was still a bit choppy in places, but your transitions were flawless. You moved very smoothly from one chapter or POV to another. 9/10 on sentence structure and transitions.
The characters are filling out very nicely! 9/10
Continuation value?
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... 80/100 :D
Now on to the next chapter!
writerinprogress94
#4
Chapter 2: seem a bit choppy. Maybe if they were combined...? Your transitions between ideas, paragraphs, and POVs were all "Sipjeom Manjeome Sipjeom!(10 out of 10)" Yay for 2PM reference :D
Dear lord, I've had to split this into 2 comments XP Me and my rambling...
Point #4~ Charcters! Any writer who's tried to write several OC's at once can appreciate the difficulty of having to give them each their own unique persona without making them a Mary-Sue. Even though by chapter two I've only seen your OC's a bit, they're all distinguishable from each other. I also think you're doing great on SHINee's POV's, too!
Final point~ Continuation value? (I believe I made up this phrase, but feel free to use it as long as you credit me XD)
In many longer stories, if by around the 5th to 10th I'm not enjoying it or interested for whatever reason, I'll stop reading. Your story, by chapter 2, is already at a 70/100 (which can drop or go up. I can already tell, though, that it'll be at least a 90/100 by the end!)
That's all until my next review! If these long reviews bother you, tell me and I'll shorten them :3
writerinprogress94
#5
Chapter 2: Even though the story is already completed, I'm still going to comment every few chapters. As an author I know how helpful feedback is!
First off, I don't think I caught any grammar or spelling mistakes in the last 2 chapters except for in Minho's POV in Chapter 1. You typed "Ewe, in a public restroom?" for Key's dialogue. "Ewe", spelled E-W-E, is a female sheep. Suggestions for the future or if you want to change it~ "Gross", "Nasty", "Disgusting", or simply "Ew"(sorry if I come across as a know-it-all, I don't try to XD). The only questionable thing is in the first sentence of Onew's POV in Chapter 2 you put "Her drooling words". Obviously I'm not all-knowing (who is, right?) so just because I don't know what that means doesn't mean it's wrong. Do you mean she's actually drooling? Could you clarify? I might want to use that word/phrase in the future, but I'd want to use it correctly! :3
Okay, now to the second point! Your word choice, which I mean by everything like your descriptions/imagery (like how the mansion was described during Key's POV in Captper 1; I don't know about you but writing the detailed descriptions is always the most tedious part of writing the story for me, so I applaud you! :D) to using words other than "said" for dialogue (one of my biggest fanfic pet peeves is when I find a story that has an amazing foreward, then I go to the first chapter and the whole thing is in "'Blah blah blah' said ___" format. Therefore, I really appreciate how you used things like *checks story quickly* "smiled"/"laughed"/"carried on"/etc.) That's really all I have to say on this point.
Point #3~ Sentence structure and segways/transitions between sentences and POVs! Over all in these first two chapters I'd give the sentence structure an 8.5/10. Some of the sentences just seemed a bit choppy. Like in Carolyn's POV in chapter 2 she says/thinks "Most people would've called it gay. I found it utterly attractive." The way they are now at the end of the paragraph they just
writerinprogress94
#6
I can't wait to read this! I listened to the piano cover while I read the opening and I swear I could actually see the whole thing! I can't wait to finish this story and head over to the sequel!
KhKheiselle0901 #7
Chapter 135: Welcome XD :D i just love this story..
EvrydayIsaShiningDay #8
Chapter 135: okay can i just say i was really confused when i saw that this was updates. xD same goes for the sequal. xD
danlyy
#9
That closure is so sad for minho...I suspect its Brianna who's become a black and red girl:/
CookieDookie #10
Ooh sequel :D
Can't wait ~