♔ Pabo Review ♔

Love You Mr. Annoying by LoveKpopBoyBandand tran-nhikpopluv (Reviewed by KatyMikayla)

• ♔ Title 4.5/5
  • It totally fits with your story, since Ji Hye falls for Kai :) But, I suggest you put an “I” in that title, making it “I love you, Mr. Annoying.”
• ♔Description & Foreword 7/10
  • Um… I liked how pretty it was, but I really suggest adding all the author’s notes/ side notes at the bottom, not in the middle of everything. It just distracts the reader. I feel like the “plot” gave a lot away, but you still gave the readers something to look forward to since you didn’t describe everything :)
• ♔Plot 18/20
  • It was a good plot :) it seemed like you knew exactly what you wanted and where you wanted to go :D Nice job here!
• ♔Characters 18/20
  • I liked how your characters had that “secret” love going on between them, even though it’s a little clichéd (But seriously, what isn’t… everything is borrowed or for something else nowadays).
  • Also, your characters were also consistent, but I’d like them better if it was “all hate” at first then they fell in love together :)
• ♔Originality 10/15
  • It seemed like your traditional “I hate you, you hate me, let’s fall in love together” story. I really didn’t see any elements that caught my attention…
• ♔Flow 10/ 15
  • It was kind of slow in the beginning. There were parts that got my attention, and others that just didn’t spark any interests :P but it did pick up :D <3
• ♔Grammar /Spelling/Vocabulary 2/5
  • Sometimes, you’ll use the “wrong form” of a word. Like in chp 1, “your dad said without any hesitant” should be “without any hesitation”
  • You kind of switch between tenses, which gets a little confusing. Just stick to one tense, the past :)
  • You sometimes don’t conjugate your verbs correctly and sometimes, your adjectives don’t agree with their corresponding verbs.
  • Oh and you need to start adding commas…T_T
• ♔Overall Enjoyment 7/ 10
  • It was really slow at the beginning for me… I’m sorry, but I couldn’t read it… it really took a lot of work for me to read it because it didn’t spark my interest. But after I read more, I started to like it more and more :D
• ♔Total: 76.5/100
  • You’re almost there!~
• ♔Reviewer’s Note & Tips:
  • I’d suggest you get a beta for this story so that people who are “grammar Nazis
     are NOT turned away from such a good story :)
  • Also, I suggest that maybe you can rewrite/edit the first 5 or so chapters that it sparks more readers interests!
  • It really was a good story once you got into it <3

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