♔ Pabo Review ♔

The Letter By: oncebefore (Reviewer: Lee_So_Yeong)

♔ Title 5/5
♔Description & Foreword 10/10
♔Plot 20/20
♔Characters 20/20
♔Originality 15/15
♔Flow 9/15
♔Grammar /Spelling/Vocabulary 5/5
♔Overall Enjoyment 10/10
♔Total: 94/100

♔Reviewer’s Note & Tips: Okay, this maybe be long.. but I want to tell you about each part:
The title was great! When I first looked at it, I was like,"The Letter.. Hmm..". Just by reading
two words, I was already drawn into the story.
Description and Foreword made me want to read the story even more!!! I liked how you didn't
give away too much information so you could pull the readers into the story.
Plot was great! As I was reading the letter, I was like,"He better read this!!" And at the end
I was happy that he was smiling about it (But I wish they would meet!! Sequel?? :D)
Originality was very nice, I haven't come across any other story or movie or anything like it
so that was good! Conflicting with what I said before, if they would have met, it would have
been a little typical, but to be honest, I think you could pull it off!
Flow.. You're probably wondering about that right..? Well the only reason why the grade is
like that is because firstly the letter takes up more than half of the chapter. So you are reading
the letter for most of the story. And I understand that this in a teenager's point of view, but
it sounds a little sloppy. Try adding more transitions, and her calling herself crazy was a little repetitive..
I didn't notice and Grammar or Spelling mistakes~ Good job!
Overall, I really enjoyed the story and it makes me wonder what happens!! Do they meet?
If they do, will he feel the same? Ugh.. So many questions!! Thank you for giving me the
opportunity to read this, it is a great story! If you do end up making a short story, following this
one.. Let me know! I would LOVE to read it!! Good Luck with all your other stories to come~

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