♔ Pabo Review ♔

“I Love You”

Review by Shawol4ever22

♔ Title 4/5 
Unoriginal but I can’t really complain because it fits with the story.
♔Description & Foreword 4/10
The description barely told me anything, it was only one sentence that said “two guys who fall in love!” :/ as for the foreword, you did tell us about your story and yourself so I’ll give you a few points for that~

♔Plot 14/20
Things seemed pretty rushed but the way things played out between the characters seemed to be moving well.
♔Characters 16/20
The characters are definitely original, I liked that (: but you should explain them more, how they act and so. Also, when you changed the POV frequently, it made things a little confusing. For example, one character would say one sentence in his POV then switch to the other character’s POV right away.
♔Originality 12/15 
I’ve got to admit it, this was fairly original :3 considering the characters used and the way they act, but I see this a lot, a gay boy being bullied and everything. You should add twists to make things more interesting and keep your readers on the edge of their seats!
♔Flow 9/15 
The flow moved pretty quickly and things between the characters moved really fast. In between some parts, you should add the backgrounds/history of some characters and such to make the flow seem more understandable, but not too much.
♔Grammar /Spelling/Vocabulary 3/5 
There were problems with the grammar, like overuse of exclamation points and such ^^; otherwise, it was fine.
♔Overall Enjoyment 6/10 
The chapters were too short and I didn’t like how it seemed like you were just listing events, but I did enjoy reading this~
♔Total: 68/100
♔Reviewer’s Note & Tips: Make the chapters longer, and stick to one person’s POV for as long as you can. Add details and include some character backgrounds, but most importantly, have fun with what you’re writing. :D

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