♔ Pabo Review ♔

The Queen and The By  Mariesha (Reviewer Hebeee)

♔ Title 4/5
y, but I like it:)


♔Description & Foreword 8/10
Actually, I don’t prefer characters introduction, because I think its the writer’s job to make her audience understands the personality of her characters, not just straight forward explaining their characteristics.

♔Plot 17/20
Wowowowow, she is quite y huh? LOL, I really like the plot because its original and I’ve never read something like this. But theres a bit too much dramas, Arghhhh Typical high-school drama. Overall, the plot is really good.

♔Characters 18/20
Omg Minya, I love her. But she is such a material girl argh, she reminds me of Sharpay or whatever that rich girl called in High School Musical. lol. btw I think Kris is just a bit too “common”, like his personality and stuff. Many other fics have the same thing about him. hmm


♔Originality 13/15
Your plot is quite original except for the characters, but overall is good :o)


♔Flow 12/15
I think the flow is a bit too fast, like what i’ve said, I really dislike fast pace stories, because people usually update their fic after they finish one chapter. So many of the writers forgets about the flow and starting to make everything in a rush. Be more careful.


♔Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary 3/5
There are some mistakes at spelling and missing words, quite confusing. Also please remember to stick with one tense!


♔Overall Enjoyment 8/10


♔Total: 80/100


♔Reviewer’s Note & Tips:
-Proofread, its very important to read your chapters before update, just in case you don’t make some silly mistakes!
-Slow the pace! Every time you are writing a chapter after 2 or 3 days from your last update, remember to re-read your story all over again, so then you won’t make some mistakes like the chapters weren’t connecting and stuff :)
-* If you really need to tell your readers something, please don’t just post a chapter to tell them that, update it on your foreword/description. Btw, I find the kitty thingy really annoying :0( Its distracting your readers from your story.
All in all, you did a great job and if you have any problems with your review, feel free to pm me :0)

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