♔ Pabo Review ♔

Forgive Me by cindy92pillay (Reviewer Alanamay6)

Title: 5/5
The title definitely matches the story well. It clearly shows the factor of the characters wanting to be forgiven.

Description & forward: 8/10
The description is a little short, and a little misleading because of some of the things said. Like "fairy tale ending" For some reason it led me to think of a fantasy type story, but it makes sense after you read the foreword. The foreword is very good and gives you a nice lead on the story! It makes you want to read more about it! So 8/10

Plot: 18/20
The plot is interesting. How it tells a story of a perfect family, that suddenly has troubles because of one fatal mistake. It was interesting to see instead of confronting Jonghyun, Key instead just went behind his back and made a rash decision, causing more conflict. The emotion is also very nice. The details given for the characters feelings were well done, and the ending was a real tear dropper, considering the death. I thought it was a combination of bitter and sweet.

Characters: 17/20
I like the characters. But I didn't really like how Jessica was the evil one xD sorry! But that's not it. I also didn't find it suiting to make Key a girl, so that also kind of through me off a little. But I LOVE JongKey, so that made me happy^^

Originality: 12/15
I have read another story similar to this one, but not completely the same. This one definitely has its originality though. The whole situation Jonghyun and Key was a first to me! 12/15

Flow: 15/15
The flow is very nice and neat. There weren't any POV's, but that's not a bad thing! Since you made sure to punctuate correctly.

Grammar/spelling/vocabulary: 4/5
There were close to no mistakes in spelling or grammar. Your vocabulary was cool, but you could have used more expressive words on certain parts. Other than that, great job!

Overall enjoyment: 10/10
I COMPLETELY enjoyed this story! I love stories that make you emotional.And this is one of those stories! I also love that you made TWO sequels to it! Even though at some parts I cringed a little, it was still awesome.

Total: 89/100%

Reviewer's notes and tips: If you mess up on a word or sentence and notice it while writing, don't keep going and come back to it because sometimes you will forget about it. Also, try not to be too repetitive.

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