♔ Pabo Review ♔

“I Won't Let You Get to Me ” by MVPshawol1214
Reviewer: Shawol4ever22

Title 5/5
I liked the title, it's pretty original and fit well with the story. It gave me an idea that one of the characters is in love but he/she's trying to fight it ^^

Description & Foreword 9/10
The description & forword gave me an idea of what the story will be like so it was pretty good and well written. I wish you added some things about the other characters though but because everything was about Key, it was good.

Plot 20/20
The plot is well written and thought out :3 in the first chapter, you moved right to the point and idea that Kibum is moving and Jonghyun is interested in finding out his secret. You switched POVs at the right moments and added need to know information about the character's pasts so I'll give you a 20 for it~

Characters 18/20
JongKey is my OTP :3 so I liked the way you used them in here. Their personalities are explained through their thoughts, actions, and the way they speak so that's pretty good. There are unoriginal characters though, using all the members of SHINee, and you should throw in some unexpected characters as well :D

Originality 12/15
Not very original but it's not like a clone of other stories. Key was bullied and beat for being gay, he moved, Jonghyun fell at first sight, etc. The past about his mother though, I hadn't seen that before c: you should add in twists and such to make the plot more original.

Flow 9/15
It moved kinda quickly ^^; be the 2nd chapter, most of the characters were introduced and the plot is moving along already. You should slow it down, add details, take your time with things.

Grammar /Spelling/Vocabulary 5/5
Grammar was pretty much perfect d(^_^)b

Overall Enjoyment 9/10
It was cute c: I liked the plot and you should continue with this story, take your time and add in more of the character's thoughts so the reader can really feel what they're feeling.


Total: 87/100

Reviewer’s Note & Tips: Your style of writing is mostly listing events and adding details and thoughts in between. There are also comparisons I saw, which I did like. You should add twists and more characters and have fun with this story ^o^

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