♔ Pabo Review ♔

The Runway Girl by Paula1988

(Reviewer:Hebeee)

♔ Title 4/5
Your title made me thought about Skins LOL, I thought it was going to be like teenagers messing around :P

♔Description & Foreword 9/10
I like your foreword and its a great hook. But please use COMMA! The bunch of words were making me running out of breath Haha

♔Plot 17/20
Its a really sweet story which they got married at the latest chapters. To be critical, I think you should stick with your title more:) Overall, your plot was good and I liked it a lot!

♔Characters 13/20
The characters’ personality was not really specific while many other fanfics had the same kind of plots. But I love how you didn’t make Ryeowook a super perfect I-can-do-anything prince charming! Hehe

♔Originality 11/15
Your story isn’t the most original just like your characters. It kind of just overlaps other fanfics I’ve read. :0(

♔Flow 9.5/15
I think everything happened a bit too fast, they never really get to know each other. I took 5.5 points off this because I prefer a slow pacing story, things that happened to quickly just does not make sense in my brain arghh. :0P (My bad)
Ex. Ryeowook thought he was in love with Grace when they’ve only met twice and talked a few times.

♔Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary 3/5
Well, I think you should stick with one color, and use punctuation more often. Then your readers can focus more on your story instead of colors and nonstop sentences. :0) Proofreading is a really important thing to do, some of your sentences doesn’t make sense, and its because you’ve missed some words :0P

♔Overall Enjoyment 6 /10

♔Total: 72/100

♔Reviewer’s Note & Tips:
Punctuation!
Add more descriptive writings instead of just talking talking talking :)
Try not to change colors
Proofread it, or just re-read it again (Just to be sure not to make silly mistakes!)
And thats all! You did a great job and if you have any problems with you review, feel free to pm me :0D

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