♔ Pabo Review ♔

You're Always On My Mind... LITERALLY by Katakatica (Reviewer rickieflower)

♔ Title 4.5/5
Your title is really good. It fits the story really well, I just think instead of “on” you should use “in”

♔Description & Foreword 9.5/10
Everything’s fine except you used the wrong “to” in the description. The one you used is “too” when you should use “to”

♔Plot 20/20
This plot is exceptionally original! I never came across a plot like this before. ^.^

♔Characters 18/20
Okay these characters are great, but Key doesn’t seem to fit the description enough. (aka he’s not diva enough)

♔Originality 13/15
The plot was really original. Just the characters aren’t as original.

♔Flow 14/ 15
I think the flow went really well, it’s just that sometimes it seems to slow down when other time it starts to speed up.

♔Grammar /Spelling/Vocabulary 4.5/5
You mostly got everything correct. Just little mistakes that wernt that noticeable.

♔Overall Enjoyment 8/ 10
Overall I really enjoyed this story, but some parts seemed to lag a bit.

♔Total: 91.5/100

♔Reviewer’s Note & Tips:
Try to make some more interesting situations. Maybe a school fight or something. That will give more attention to the story.

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