TITLE  (005/005)
Your title is really interesting because of its meaning. For me, it
sounded like something against prejudges and  I really liked that. 
The title makes you think about the proper meaning behind it. 
Why do people think that Kai is cold? Is it true? 
It fits the plot really well and is unique its way because there are
no other stories with such a title. 

DESCRIPTION/FOREWORD  (010/010)

You don't reveal too much in the foreword and make it
sound interesting and wake the interest of the reader like that. 
We don't really know the relation between our main characters 
because they could be nothing but friends but at the same time,
they could also be a couple for Jongin to act differently towards
her. The overall appearance is also nice to look at and easy to
read. 

CHARACTERIZATION  (020/020)

Your characters were definitely interesting. 
Minah seems to be a nice girl with dreams. She knows what she 
wants for her future but she also seems to be a bit insecure
and shy. She needs a friend by her side that encourages her
wich is Jongin though she is also friends with Jongdae. She is 
obvious to his feelings for her until he tells her in a rather direct 
way. She doesn't trust Jongin at the start but starts to accept 
him as a friend as he shows that he cares for her. 
Jongin is someone everyone describes as cold but over the story, we don't really see this side of him. He always asks nice and caring
towards Minah that we can't help but to think that he really likes 
her. He is not rich and works to help his mother and is willing to do
everything for her though we don't really find out what exactly 
he is doing. 
Jongdae is the childhood friend of Minah and is in love with her 
but she only sees him as her brother. He tries to accept it and 
doesn't confess her until the end of the story. Though he likes her
there are times he acts without thinking so he hurts Minah a few 
times without meaning it. Still, they always try to help each other
and have a beautiful friendship.

PLOT  (016/020)

The story shows us from the start that Jongin doesn't
have that many friends and that the only person he is
really nice to be Minah. You can't help but wonder whether he likes her and wants to befriend her like that. The whole story it seems to be the case because he is always there for her, helps her and listens to her, he encourages her to chase her dreams and you can't help but wonder whether they will end up as a couple. But then there is also Jongdae who obviously has a crush on Minah. 
But you can see that she doesn't feel the same about her, still, 
he tries to be a good friend to her. Minah is a rich girl and her maid 
Mrs. Kim could be related to Jongin. We find out about her past 
and that she indeed is his mother. 
Until then everything was fine but towards the end, it got a bit weird. 
Minah finds out that Jongin just wanted to use her but they still 
stay friends and she wants her father to forget about the debts of 
the Kim's. Your ending is pretty open and leaves lots of questions
open, like what exactly was Jongin's plan. Will they stay friends? 
And other questions like that. It came off rushed like you wanted 
to end the story there no matter what and as a reader, it was 
unsatisfying like that. So maybe it would be good to answer the 
questions and to work it out that it seems less rushed. Especially
because Minah suddenly seems like she doesn't care that Jongin
wanted to use her for something. 

WRITING STYLE (020/020)

Your writing style is okay. Once you started the story, you wanted 
to know how it ends so your writing is interesting but you do have 
a little problem with grammar which I will write about in the 
grammar section. 

GRAMMER  (015/020)

There were a few mistakes in your story that can easily be 
corrected. I won't write down all of them but a few as examples:

Mrs. Lee asked worriedly, looking over my face. 
Mrs. Lee asked worriedly, looking at my face. 

But I found myself always wanting all those loving affactions he gave me. 
But I found myself always wanting all those loving affections he gave me. 

Just be there at the school rooftop, 10 a.m,...
Just be there on the school rooftop, 10 a.m,...

He looked so worried I thought in a short moment. 
He looked so worried I thought for a short moment. 

hair pain →hairpin 
house maids → housemaids

You mainly have a problem with prepositions as three of the examples above show but also some misspellings of words. 

PERSONAL ENJOYMENT (004/005)

I enjoyed reading your story until the ending. Because of what I 
wrote above the ending was too rushed for me and to sudden. 
It left me unsatisfied. 


TOTAL SCORE (090/100)


REVIEWER'S ADVICE:

You could rewrite the ending to make it less rushed and read your 
chapters once again to correct the mistakes or if you don't want 
to do it yourself, you can also ask for a beta-reader.
I hope my review helps you, feel free to PM me if you have a 
question.