♪ The Gisaeng by littlemisshappyify

♪♫ Midnight Sonata Café ♫♪ | Reviews and Recs [CLOSED for requests & READ CH. 37]
R E V I E W
THE GISAENG
 
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          by littlemisshappyify
          OC || BIGBANG || 2NE1
          Angst | Romance
          Chaptered | Ongoing
          Reviewed up to Chapter 3
          Reviewed by hopexdreams
 
♪ THE CHASER
by INFINITE

This review is posted LATE on my (momodays09) part. The reviewer, hopexdreams, actually had this done a long while back in late May but it has taken a while for me to post it due to my hectic schedule. I deeply apologize to both my reviewer and the requestor. All in all, I hope this review helps you and please don't take it out on hopexdreams. If anything, take it out on me haha...Thank you!

Title (4/5):

Although I didn't know what Gisaeng meant, the title was eye-catching to me. I was satisfied with the title because I don't know any other title which fits the story better than yours.


Appearance (4/5):
The poster and background fit very well. It gave out the dark theme and set the mood. Well done.

Foreword/Description (7/10):

The description was short and intriguing, but the placing didn't feel right to me.

It could've been something like this ::

 
Set during the Joseon Dynasty when an ambitious king took over the throne
after the mysterious death of the royal family,
comes a story of forbidden love, misery, and betrayal.
 
I also loved the glossary of terms as it kind of promotes Korea's culture and all, but I felt as though the glossary should be above the reviews. Other than that, your foreword and description is amazing!
 
Plot/Storyline (14/20):
Although the story was quite predictable, the plot was quite original and I've never read something like this before. You did a good job there. I have nothing much to say here as everything is pretty much flawless.

Character Development (25/30):

I loved all the characters, especially Seryung and Seung Yu. I always loved realistic characters and everyone could relate to them. There should be more development on the characters in the upcoming chapters to make the story more interesting. Other than that, well done!


Use of Language / Mechanics (19/20):

I reread your story several times, and there were no mistakes. Good job proof-reading your story! The words used were rather advanced too. Keep up the great work!

Flow (8/10):

The flow is great, but the rather long chapters made your story seem draggy. However, long chapters aren't that bad, as long as the flow is still good. You took time to let the readers understand what you wrote, which is great. Everything's good.

Reader's View/Enjoyment:

I rarely read stories like this and I found myself enjoying your story very much. I'm sure the readers enjoy your story very much too, judging from their comments. I love your writing style, and you have a gift in writing.


Final Score: (81/100)

Additional Comments:
I'm really sorry if you didn't like the review or it didn't help you! Your story is really good! Looking forward to see more of your stories!

Review Credit to hopexdreams from ♪♫ Midnight Sonata Café ♫♪
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momodays09
im sorry for the delay. school is just ughh. I can't make any promises, but I will aim to finish the two reviews in progress by the end of the month x.x

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-caas-
#1
Hi. I'm starting a shops list and I want to add your shop/gallery/list/contest/roleplay :
Read the rules, complete this form , put it in the comments box for this link and you will be on the list.

Author's name:
Author's link:
Co-authors:
Created:
Status:
Banner's link:
Shop's Title:
Shop's link:
Shop genre:
Description:
Author's Note:
Info you want to add:
Services/Packs/posters/trailers exp:

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/802501/dream-city-shops-list-graphic-poster-trailer-advertise-shop-layouts-reviewer
Diviana #2
Chapter 39: Chapter 38: I am surprised you got to my review as quickly as you did. Thank you for the review, I will fix those grammar mistakes. I'll keep in mind to be more detailed as I write (that as has always been a problem of mine). I don't understand how my foreword was messy though. I'll credit later today.
JESLEN #3
Chapter 36: Hi thank you for this wonderful review. I agree with everything that was mentioned and I'll try my best to incorporate the suggestion. Yes, Haha, I think this was posted late because there were some things in the review that were not included in the story anymore :D Anyway, thank you very much for the review. 81 is still a decent score since I barely started the story. Credited ^_^
azxema
#4
Chapter 37: read the review.
wow, even though I'm lacking 72 is pretty much a decent marks right? right? lol
I guess I should not abandon and pay more attention to the little things such as the comma, I didn't know it'd make so much differences.
Thanks for the effort - really appreciate it. really.
overdosagexo #5
Chapter 28: Hello >< I am so sorry about this late reply... Yes, I would still like to read my review :) I apologize if this adds on to your burden...
Story: 包子 (Baozi)
aeterniti
#6
Chapter 34: Thank you for the review (and the feature - wow, I'm honored)! I read it well ^^
I actually like your way of thinking that Jongdae was inhaling the flames over and over again as atonement for his sins. The thought hadn't crossed my mind, haha XD
Ah, yes...Yixing XD To be quite honest, I just needed a ghost of his past, and since Yixing's my other bias.....X) Yeah, there was really no deep reason behind it being Yixing. Just personal preference, ahaha XD
But I'm glad that you enjoyed reading it while reviewing it ^^ I'm glad that I was able to convey the process of insanity in Jongdae to you, the reader. :)
AleatoryThinker #7
Chapter 33: Thank you for the review! I really appreciate the feedback. I'm seriously a dunce when it comes to titles as in I have no idea if the title is good or bad no matter how many times I think it over. In this case, I couldn't come up with anything that wouldn't give the assignment away, because, yeah, I'm not creative. Plus I'm not concise with words. A bad combination.

I'll definitely be on the lookout for those boring/lagging scene when I'm editing. The make-out scene was never planned so the suddeness makes sense. I'll either move it on the timeline or possibly cut it out. Making the character emotions is something I'll have to work a lot harder on, but I'm really glad the characters came off as realistic.

Once again, thank you for completing this review as it helps me a lot!
vexatious #8
Chapter 32: Thank you so much for the review! I haven't read it yet, but soon I will <3 I've already credited you in my foreword, so thank you so much again!
azxema
#9
Chapter 28: Not that person anymore's author here.
I wouldn't mind a late review, i'm not in a rush so yeah. I still want my review
vexatious #10
Chapter 28: Hi! Im sorry for the late response i havent been able to go online. Yes i would still want to read my request :)