Title (3/5):

There are a handful of stories with the same titles of yours, but the title is still appealing. The words runes and despair together triggers the curiosity of the readers to click on your story and read more of it. The title was well thought.

Appearance (3/5):

Your poster was alright, but it just gave out the fantasy-ish and mellow feeling. I like the pictures in the poster though, both of the characters having sunglasses on which kind of fits the genre of your story, action.

Foreword/Description (7/10):

Your description was really intriguing, however I found a mistake.

Human lives were lost and sacrified. (sacrified -> sacrificed)

What I didn't like in your foreword was that your foreword was as long as your description. I'm not going against having author's notes in your foreword, but they should always be brief, with the right amount of information. Other than that, your description and foreword was great.

Plot/Storyline (17/20):

The plot can easily be found, in the future where the country or the world is in ruins and there's this organisation or society found to restore the ruins. However, despite this being an alternate universe story meaning a wild imagination is needed, you are able to describe everything clearly, making them seem very real. This skill of yours could definitely be improved and soon, you'll find your story having a lot of readers and subscribers. I can see the potential in you and the story. Work hard and keep it up!

Character Development (23/30):

The way you introduced and developed your characters were brilliant, but I didn't like Eunkyung's character that much. She seemed to be a Mary Sue — she has no flaws, or close to none. After reading through the 11 chapters, I can't seem to find any reason to like her. She seems really cliché. Luhan's development was okay, but my favorite characters got to be Mark, Jongdae and Jongin. Their characters' personality and behaviour were very realistic and normal. Keep up your hard work.  Good job!

Use of Language / Mechanics (14/20):

Firstly, I noticed you have a tendency to write a long sentences with several commas or 'as' and no period. Although it's not wrong to do that, long sentences reduce the appeal to the readers to continue reading. As an example,

"When you were five, he promised you that he would come home for Christmas since he missed your birthday, even though it was a few minutes before Christmas ended, he still burst through the door wearing a Santa Claus suit."

Here’s an example of the long sentence I was talking about. You could have altered the structure of the sentence by either summarizing it or break it into several sentences.

What it could've been ::

"When you were five, he promised you that he would come home for Christmas since he missed your birthday. Even though it was a few minutes before Christmas ended, he still burst through the door wearing a Santa Claus suit."

You also have the tendency to end a dialogue with a tag verb, such as 'she whispered, he screamed' without a comma. I suggest you to revise every single dialogue with the proper and correct format when you edit your chapters.

Other than that, I think you have done a great job in proof-reading your chapters. Just make sure to follow the basic rules of punctuation and you’ll be perfect.

Flow (8/10):

Although I don’t really favor long-chaptered stories, I still think that the flow of Runes of Despair is planned well. I realize that the characters are still in their childhood. If there were any drama or conflicts between the characters, the pace will be slower and your story might start being draggy. Nevertheless, the revelations of their pasts in clear the steady pace when you came back to the recent time was an excellent job.

Reader's View/Enjoyment:

I’ve read a lot of alternate universe fictions nowadays and I'm quite pleased with Runes of Despair. However, the style of writing and some other aspects failed to intrigue me greatly. Anyway, I see the potential in you. Hwaiting!

Final Score: (75/100)

Additional Comments:
I'm really sorry if you didn't like the review or it didn't help you! Your story is really good, but you just need to follow the basic rules of punctuation and your story will be close to flawless. Other than that, your story is really good. Looking forward to see more of your stories!

Review Credit to hopexdreams from ♪♫ Midnight Sonata Café ♫♪