Temptation

a. Title (4/5) -Your title is simple but it's a bit common since I've read fics with the same title as yours. But still, it's nice you chose the one word 'Temptation' as your title, it simply fits the plot of your story.

b. Poster & Background & Trailer (7/10) -I like your poster, it seems animated (since it's moving). Well, I don't know how to describe it but it was very eye-catching in my eye, I guess to everybody's eyes too and it was very beautiful and yet simple. I just love it, very creative. For the background and trailer there was nothing, well, that's totally fine and not that important.

c. Description & Foreword (8/10)- Your description makes me wonder what's going to happen to the first chapter  and it was also suspenseful, the way you wrote it, the way I imagined it to be. It was also like a prologue although I didn't know who was saying those words. For the foreword, you didn't write anything. I wished I had the chance to see some of your descriptions about the characters inside your story. Still, great description. You didn't show or tell the readers about the whole plot of your story but made them wonder instead why and what was happening.

d. Plot (8/10) -This is actually my first time to read a Yuri fanfic (but I've read ) and I'm not a fan of Yuri fics. But when I read yours, I kind of changed my mind. Your Yuri fic is just amazing; I felt the thrill while reading it until the last chapter I've read chapter 26. I like the plot of your story since it's a very thrilling romance and love triangle. I'm also not a huge fan of SNSD (I think I'm the only one) but when I read your fic, I imagined them and I began to like them in my imaginations! Especially Yulti couple, I am not their fan (I guess in Temptation only! or maybe some more are coming? Ha-ha) Great plot BTW!

e. Originality (9/10) -I think it's original .Everything about this fic 'Temptation' is very creative love triangle including Siwon in it, joining the girls who love girls, or let's say tomboys!

f. Flow (4/5) -It was fine I guess. I'm fine with how your story was turning out as it was progressing. Not rushed, not slow. Only problem is some chapters are cliffhanger, except when I read the next and next until there wasn't a next anymore. It was also a bit boring at the beginning (that's just me), but as I continued reading, starting from Chapter 5, I started to realize I was actually enjoying it.  So do update.

g. Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (38/40) -I found a few wrong grammars in your story, as in few - as in very very tiny. The only problem I think is the use of present tense instead of past tense, I've seen only a few when someone talked. Hmmmp, over-all, not a big mistake so keep up the good work! And do update!

h. Writing Style (9/10) - I like how you write your story. It was neat and longer since you gave them space too much so it's neat and well-organized. The problem is it was a bit confusing since you didn't put who was narrating the first chapter and then the next, like POV's or something, but anyway, I did find out who was talking too after they said their names. Just perfect writing style.

Total = 87/100 %

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