Making Him Smile

a. Title (3/5)
It didn't really catch my eye, it sounded boring and cliché for me. It could have been better if you chose another title that would fit the best or something unique but has a connection with your story. But well, since your title has to say about the main plot of your story, it's okay I guess.

b. Poster & Background & Trailer (9/10)
Cute! Especially the lower part/pic! But the upper, I think it's a little fuzzy! In my eyes, and the colors are not balanced well! It would be better if it was adjusted better. But I think the poster is really cute I love it! The background is just neat!

c. Description & Foreword (9/10)

I like it. The foreword, you wrote the character's names but there wasn't any of their descriptions. I think it would be presentive if you put even a little something about the main characters (except the description where you said Seungho was never a happy guy, etc.) , including the supporting characters. Your description is awesome, I love it, it made me wonder how Lee Joon could make Mr. Cold Guy Seungho smile.

d. Plot (7/10)

I was not attached to your plot very much, but I wanted to continue reading it anyway. I guess you got me in the foreword, I wanted to know more from it.

e. Originality (6/10)
It's very cliché. Like some movies or TV Shows I've watched. There's a cold and awful and mean guy, and a cheerful and happy guy who wants Mr. Cold guy to smile, he'll do his best. It's too common, but it's a great story since there's angst, fluff and drama!

f. Flow (3/5)
It's fine, both slow and fast. Sometimes it's too fast, which made me wish that you made it slower to make it more interesting and exciting. But then it's boring sometimes.

g. Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (28/30)
Almost faultless. Maybe the 'push ups' thing, you should write it like this 'push-ups' if you're writing a novel. And this:

He woke up to his parents fighting again, about who knows what. (I just don't understand but maybe it should be 'He woke up to see his parents fighting again...etc.) It's kind of messy  right there.

Your spellings are flawless, and I guess sometimes you have a different kind of spelling but not a wrong spelling either but a British or U.K. spelling. Just saying. I saw a few misspelled words like : genious. It should begenius. And it would be better for us readers to read in a way where there's a new paragraph for a new dialogue, just my opinion.

Other than that, you have great writing skills.

h. Writing Style (10/10)

Not too descriptive, but very straight forward and clean so it's easy to understand. That's why I love your writing style.


i. Overall Enjoyment (7/10) -

Not very enjoyable in my side, because sometimes I thought I was bored with it. However, the plot is interesting so I enjoyed it, kept reading it til the end. Some parts, the enjoyment and excitement in me is so high, then the next chapter it would be low. I love fics and yours is a very interesting one, although I wished Seungho was more cold as in doesn't really laugh at an early chapter. I wished he laughed later on, that's so mean of me. But I really like your story, because I love !

Total Score: 84/100%