Dream Catchers: The Wrath Of Fear

Title (2/5)

Your title is too long and it looks like you just couldn’t decide which title to use so you chose
both of them. I think you should use Dream Catchers or The Wrath of Fear, not both of them
together. Personally I like Dream Catchers because it’s not something I’ve seen before and it
would greatly interest me enough to want to check the story out.

Poster/Background/Trailer (2/10)

The poster is very poorly made. It seems like a really interesting story and I would expect a
captivating poster to go along with it. You should request from a shop because it would give
your story some edge to it.

Description & Foreword (3/10)

You wrote way too much in the description and foreword. No reader is going to actually read all
that unless it has their idol’s name in it. Keep it short, simple, and relevant to what we’re about to
read. There is no need to explain the concept of what the Illusion and Nightmares are.

You also don’t need to put in character descriptions, but sometimes exceptions can be made
when you have random idols that don’t normally appear in a story together. Just one thing, don’t
give someone a name if they are already know. Lee Dasom is Lee Dasom, not anyone else just
because she’s an ulzzang. I can tell you that ulzzang’s have just as many fans as idols do and you
don’t see them writing stories about our idols and giving them different names.

Plot (0/10)

You have three chapters and a long description, but that still doesn’t give me any insight on
what the story is even about. Not to mention, what you wrote in the description was completely
confusing because it was too long.

What you have written in the three chapters seemed completely irrelevant to whatever you
were trying to express in the description. At first it seemed like it was going to be a dark and
mysterious story, but from chapter one it seemed like a complete joke.

Originality (/10)

Since I don’t even know what the plot is about I can’t exactly grade you on this.

Flow (0/5)

The story jumps all over the place from the two OC girls to Myungsoo and Gongchan and the
topics you chose to write about…what’s the point of that? Get it out straight the beginning of the
plot, not play around and write irrelevant scenes for three chapters.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (25/30)

Looks fine, just stop abusing the caps lock. Dooooonnn’tt makeee worddsss likkee thisss, it’s
annoying. And there is no need to put ~ at the end of words.

Writing Style (4/10)

You lack everything a story needs.

Plot, setting, problem, who faces what problem, events, rise to , major event/drama,
, resolution.

Your characters are bland and have nothing to them. You just write them however they come to
mind, but you need to stop and give them a certain personality and learn how to write how that
personality is portrayed. You also need to quickly show how everyone is related to each other, or
else it’s just going to look like a story with random characters having their own thing going on.

Setting is pretty much nonexistent. You may say that they are in a library or at school, but you
need to describe that and incorporate it into how the characters think and act.

Overall Enjoyment (0/10)

Your story is messy and unorganized, there is nothing to enjoy.

Total Score: 36/100%

reviewed by: peacelovehugs