His Blond Hair by lemondrop8398

Title (4/5)

The title is creative and fits the plot, but it is not as interesting to capture the readers’ attention.

Appearance (4/5)

The poster is cute and fits the mood of the story, but it would support the appearance of the story if you add a background that matches the poster, instead of just plain white.

Description/Foreword (14/15)

The description and foreword is perfect. The description gives enough to tell the reader a little bit about the story, but not too much to bore the reader. It is also great that you added pictures of all the characters that will be appearing in the story, but what would get you the 15/15 is if you would simply tell the readers the personality of the character. 

Plot (15/25)

The plot is nice and enjoyable, but this plot is commonly used. But, I do love how instead of the story is about the beginning of a relationship or  in the middle of a relationship, it is actually about how the ex-boyfriend still loves his girlfriend, but there is competition. 

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