Searching For Love by kpopforver25

Title (0/5)

It's a cliché title, and it's not very attention-attracting.

Appearance (3/5)

To be honest, the poster looks a bit messy. It looks plain, and it wouldn't attract my attention if I ever came across this poster. However, it does show who the characters are and the setting of the story, so I can't argue about that.

Description/Foreword (5/15)

Both your description and foreword are filled with writing errors. Plus, in my opinion, both sections were quite messy. There were colors everywhere, emoticons, and highlights. Try to prevent yourself from using so much color, emoticons, and highlights. You want the readers to be introduced to the story with an organized, easy-to-read description and foreword.

Plot (5/25)

It's another typical story where people live together and eventually fall in love. I guess one unexpected part was when Yoona helped out Kyuhyun during the appearance of Seohyun. The plot didn't really interest me since it's been seen so much.

Characters (5/15)

The characters were also cliché. If you read most comedy, romance, and fluff fanfictions, you can probably see these types of characters. However, I had to admit, I didn't think Seohyun would be so rude because usually Seohyun plays the innocent, pure character.

Writing (Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation) (3/20)

You had way too much writing errors. Most were in grammar, and a few were in spelling and punctuation. Sometimes, you used a word wrong, which sometimes confused me. When you're using the quotation mark, you don't put a space between the front quotation mark and the first word of the quote. You also don't put a space between the last quotation mark and the last word of the sentence. 

Example of what NOT to do: " Luckily! I got a one-week vacation from that troublesome work! "

Example of what TO do: "Luckily, I got a one-week vacation from that troublesome work!"

See how I deleted the unnecessary spaces?

Chapter 1:

Incorrect:

" Luckily! I got a one-