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The Many Faces Of Love by elf_verl

Title (2/5)

First of all, I don't see how the title relates to your story so far. Second of all, the "of" shouldn't be capitalized because it isn't really important in the title. If I ever passed by this type of fanfic, then I probably wouldn't click on it because of its bland title.

 

Appearance (3/5)

The poster is a bit messy, and a bit misleading. I hardly see Leeteuk in this story, and Sungmin finally appears after almost half the chapters you have. It might be just me, but when I look at the poster, I sense a sad, angst story, but the story itself seems to head towards the comedy type.

 

Description/Foreword (7/15)

The description is a bit confusing, but I kind of understand the concept.In addition to that, you could've place either one of description. You could've either placed the bolded text in the description or the summary of the story in the description. You didn't have to put both – either one of them would be fine.

As for your foreword…I love it! Except your foreword if kind of long, and I believe that you added too much information. You could've ended your foreword when you ended it at, "Which of these have your experienced?" That would've caught my attention, unlike the bottom foreword where it starts from, "Love is like a rubrix cube…" to "Who would be worth it?"

 

Plot (15/25)

I've seen a few stories with a similar plot like this, so I can't say that this story is unique. However, in the beginning, the plot immediately grabbed my attention. It's really interesting, and the first chapters are attention-grabbing.

 

Characters (12/15)

The characters seem pretty cliché. You can find most of the character's personality in other fanfics using the same characters as you. Howev

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500sunny500
#1
@reeseee3: Sorry! We're closed! >.< However, we made a new request shop right here:
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/231323
The forms are the same, so you can just copy and paste! :D
500sunny500
#2
@scarlettwolf: I think I understand what you mean. However, in our current generation, we use single spaces instead of double spaces. Double spaces were used a long time ago because it was harder to tell if the punctuations were single spaced. Nowadays, we can easily tell the spaces because each key on your keyboard uses up to same. I'm not sure if I got your point, but here's the link where I got all this information: http://desktoppub.about.com/cs/typespacing/a/onetwospaces.htm
scarlettwolf
#3
It appears to be AFF... =/ (at least in the comments)
Well anyways, as long as you know about it(like how to double space), I'm fine with it.
scarlettwolf
#4
hmm...
Well, I think it's AFF. It looks like there is only one space when there are really two...
It's in every chapter I think too. But it seems it's AFF...
Hi. I'm scarlettwolf
Hi. I'm scarlettwolf
500sunny500
#5
@scarlettwolf: We're not exactly sure what you're talking about. ^^;; Would you please mind pointing out the chapter we made our mistake on?
scarlettwolf
#6
AYO! ^^
Not really gonna say too much, and I have no idea if this is just AFF being weird, but after a period, exclamation mark, etc. you need to have double spacing. Like right there.
Maybe it's just AFF formatting, I couldn't really tell... ._.
ShanghaiTiger
#7
I'll credit you tomorrow, okay?
ShanghaiTiger
#8
thanks :)