{review} Calling HNsenpai
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L. Joe: The Stupid Cupid I Ever Met by HNsenpai
Title (3/5)
The title is extremely cute! But, your title has bad grammar. Instead of “L.Joe: The Stupid Cupid I Ever Met!” it is supposed to be either:
L. Joe: The Most Stupid Cupid I’ve/I Have Ever Met! L. Joe: The Stupid Cupid I Met!Remember to put a space between the “L.” and “Joe.”
Appearance (2/5)
It would be better to have a poster for your story. Your background is a little strange and awkward, too. I’ll give you some points for at least having a picture of L. Joe and a background.
Description/Foreword (7.5/15)
So, I will just be ignoring the “status – hiatus” post. But, the other part of your foreword simply seems a bit too general and it does not really tell the reader what story they will be reading. Also, you have a small spelling error. “Hye” is supposed to be “hey,” well, I’m just guessing that is what you’re trying to say. What my language arts teacher always say, “Always revise and edit!”
Your foreword is perfect. There’s a summary for your story, the characters and their personality, even contents of the story. Great!
Plot (25/25)
This plot is extremely unique! I’ve never read any story with a plot like yours. It’s fun, creative, and cute. Full points!
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