{review} Calling Notperfect
★ Silly Dreams Request Shop ◕ ◡ ◕Mr. Teddy Bear by Notperfect
Title (4/5)
It's not like any title I've seen, but depending on my mood, I wouldn't have clicked on it.
Appearance (3/5)
You didn't have a poster, but you did have a background. I thought the background was cute, even though it's only a picture of a teddy bear.
Description/Foreword (6/15)
Your description was fine. There were some grammatical errors, but other than that, it was okay. Your foreword, however, was a big problem. You could've replaced all your author's notes with the character description you had under your description section or the teddy bear guidelines in chapter 2.
Plot (20/25)
Indeed, the plot was pretty creative. I actually seen a few fanfics like this, but it's kind of rare to find fanfics where someone changes from some kind of object to a human. However, your plot confused me at times. I didn't understand if the teddy bear was always with her, or if the teddy bear disappeared, and then appeared again. I also didn't understand why Taeyang suddenly decided to go to school, which was kind of an expected event for me.
Characters (10/15)
The only unique characters I find here in this fanfic is probably only Taeyang. The rest of the character's personalities and characteristics are pretty cliché.
Writing (Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation) (13/20)
You didn't really have any spelling errors, but mostly grammar and punctuation errors. Let me point out that when a different character speaks or thinks, they have their own sentence.
Chapter 1:
Incorrect:
IU happily skipped to school, waiting to see what would happen on her first day of 11th grade. "I can't wait to see Yoseob oppa today!! Did he get more cooler over vacation?" she excitedly said to herself.
"La, la, la," she sang in her beautiful voice, warming it up for school. Suddenly, three boys dressed up in ragged clothing came up to her. "Wow...she's one little chick, bro! Let's take her to bang at our house!" one said. T
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