A Major Cutie? More like a Douche Bag! by b2stlyoseob125

Title (1/5)

The title is long and too wordy. The title itself grabs attention, and reveals the general plot of your story. For an example, before I read this story and looked at the title, I could tell that the main girl character would dislike the main guy character. I could tell that it would be a romance-comedy story, and that it would have a pretty cliché plot. In addition, it should be, "A Major Cutie? More Like a Douche Bag!" instead of "A Major Cutie? More like a Douche Bag!"

Appearance (5/5)

It has the character, a romance-comedy theme– I like it!

Description/Foreword (8/15)

Your description is too long. Your description should give a short summary about your story. Instead, your description has a mix of a summary and a scene from the story.

In your foreword, it would be best for you to add the scene about the gum being stuck in the girl's hair. If you add a character description, than the readers will expect the characters to act like the character description in your foreword says. In addition to that, it's best to show your readers the characters than telling them directly.

Plot (14/25)

The plot is pretty cliché. I can see plots like this in some rom-com stories. There's a girl who meets a guy and thinks