When I Fall by lockeyme & krystal_24

Title (1/5)

First of all, your title is very cliché since it is a song from After School and as a result, many other people will want to use the same title. Second, don’t use a title if it doesn’t match up with the plot of the story.

Appearance (2.5/5)

I can feel the mood coming off from the poster–great. But, the background throws me off. Why is the background a picture of a restaurant/cafe? 

Description/Foreword (6/15)

The description is a bit confusing and the description reveals too much of the story making the reader uninterested. Try to cut off some off of the description. 

The foreword is a bit empty. It would be better to tell who the characters are, what personalities they have, their status, and a picture for each character so readers can vision them in their mind as they read your story.

Plot (18/25)

The plot is very interesting and unique. I never seen anything like it before! I like how there’s suspense and romance mixed together. But, there is a dull in the story for most readers who like romance and not much suspense and