Complicated Lies by saltysugar

Title (0/5)

The title is cliché. Titles like these won't really attract readers because it is too common and not very eye-catching.

Appearance (4/5)

I think the appearance is nice, but the quote is quoted wrong. It's supposed to be, "choose one and lose the other or keep both and lose both," not "choose one lost another or keep both and lost both."

Description/Foreword (7/15)

Your description was fine. There were some grammar errors in it, but it was enough to tell the readers what they would be reading. You got most of your points docked off here because of your foreword. All the foreword told me was your characters. I don't dock off points when the author credits someone, adds a disclaimer, etc., but your foreword didn't tell me anything about your story.

Plot (23/25)

It's a typical angst one-shot, but I love how Jinyoon wasn't able to keep one or both of the guys. The end really touched my heart, especially the last sentence.

Characters (10/15)

Although I like the plot, the characters seem a bit common. The characters give off a "typical romance story," but I can see some originality in them.

Writing (Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation) (12/20)

You had more grammar errors than any of the other errors. Most of your errors were using the wrong verb tense.

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