{review} Calling honeylove

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Fall For Me, Like All The Other Girls by honeylove

Title (3/5)

Your title is unique, but not very creative. It is plain and might not capture many readers’ attention.

 

Appearance (5/5)

Perfect! You have a lovely poster and background.

 

Description/Foreword (7/15)

Your description seems a bit awkward. Also, you revealed the whole story in the description which will lose the readers’ interest.

It is nice that you have a short excerpt in your foreword, but try including the characters and tell the personalities/hobbies.

 

Plot (9/25)

In some ways, your plot is cliche. But, I can tell that you added some of your own originality.

 

Characters (8/15)

The OC, Misoo, has a personality that does slightly stand out, but, your characters are a bit cliche.

 

Writing (Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation) (14/20)

 

Chapter 1

 

Incorrect: Beep. Beep. Again it rang.

Correct: Beep. Beep. Again, it rang.

 

Incorrect: Every time she’s there there’s always something new.

Correct: Every time s

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500sunny500 #1
@reeseee3: Sorry! We're closed! >.< However, we made a new request shop right here:
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/231323
The forms are the same, so you can just copy and paste! :D
500sunny500 #2
@scarlettwolf: I think I understand what you mean. However, in our current generation, we use single spaces instead of double spaces. Double spaces were used a long time ago because it was harder to tell if the punctuations were single spaced. Nowadays, we can easily tell the spaces because each key on your keyboard uses up to same. I'm not sure if I got your point, but here's the link where I got all this information: http://desktoppub.about.com/cs/typespacing/a/onetwospaces.htm
scarlettwolf #3
It appears to be AFF... =/ (at least in the comments)
Well anyways, as long as you know about it(like how to double space), I'm fine with it.
scarlettwolf #4
hmm...
Well, I think it's AFF. It looks like there is only one space when there are really two...
It's in every chapter I think too. But it seems it's AFF...
Hi. I'm scarlettwolf
Hi. I'm scarlettwolf
500sunny500 #5
@scarlettwolf: We're not exactly sure what you're talking about. ^^;; Would you please mind pointing out the chapter we made our mistake on?
scarlettwolf #6
AYO! ^^
Not really gonna say too much, and I have no idea if this is just AFF being weird, but after a period, exclamation mark, etc. you need to have double spacing. Like right there.
Maybe it's just AFF formatting, I couldn't really tell... ._.
ShanghaiTiger #7
I'll credit you tomorrow, okay?
ShanghaiTiger #8
thanks :)
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