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The Review: 

1. Punctuation, Spelling and Grammar (18/20)
- Your mistakes are just minor, some of your words were wrongly spelt (i.e. corrider is spelt as corridor). And an ellipsis always consists of three dots and not two. So what you wrote is this: It looked haunted, but, the school itself was haunted, spider webs hanging off walls, ivy leaves growing on the school walls and the windows were.. fake.

It is just a minor mistake but of course it is better for your future stories, so this is what it is supposed to look like: were... fake. And there were some words that you have mixed up as one when it is supposed to be two. 

2. Title (3.5/5)

- As much as I love the title, it just doesn't fit in your story. Suzy is the main character here and she is described as a 'bad little girl', but as much as your story speaks to me, she is not that much of a bad girl; yes, she was late to her class several times but I wouldn't count that as something that could actually gain her the name of a 'bad little girl', and I have taken notice that Miss Oldhearty classified her as a 'bad little girl', but if I were to point out someone in your story that really is a bad girl, I would say it is her (Miss Oldhearty). 

3. Organization (8/10)

- For a one-shot, you've done pretty good, if I may say. The only thing that I