♡ B2utyful-Elf // A Captivating Captivity
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A Captivating Captivity by B2utyful-Elf
Main Characters: KaiSoo
Genre/s: Angst, Drama, One-Shot
Status: Completed
Reviewer: ButterCookies_
The Review:
1. Punctuation, Spelling and Grammar (19/20)
- You did a amazing job in this section, I couldn't find any punctuation errors and your grammar usage was great!
2. Title (2/5)
- The word "captivating" means attractive, and "captivity" means imprisonment or hostage. I don't think 'Captivating Imprisonment' sounds fine to the storyline!
3. Organization (5/10)
- For Kyungsoo's dream, you might want to make it clear that it was not in reality so you might want to change that!
- And for the foreword, you should put the word DRAPETOMANIA together with the description and not too far away from each other.
4. Details (7/10)
- For the introduction of Jongin's friends, you should put the introduction together with the story instead o
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