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Mr. Chu by PinKyPurPle13
Main Characters: Naeun, Eunji, Namjoo, Kai, Baekhyun, and Kyungsoo
Genre/s: Comedy, Romance, Sweet
Status: Ongoing
Reviewer: jaebal

The Review: 

1. Punctuation, Spelling and Grammar (9/20)
- This section, well, it's pretty messy. Capitalization is really important and a lot of your proper nouns aren't capitalized when it's supposed to be. (i.e. taemin is supposed to be Taemin because it's the name of a person).

I'll try to rewrite some of the paragraphs:

You wrote:
" Thank you " Namjoo shly . "Why are you here ? " Namjoo asked , glance at their 3 fanboys ." Ani . We just walk but suddenly we meet you " Fanboy 1 explain. " Why are you dont go home . Its already late" Namjoo worried . " Any other members in there ? After we take picture with you all , and then we'll go home . We promised" Fanboy 2 asked and explain . " YEs .  But you promised , ok . you'll go home after this . " Namjoo in the car .

Fanboys happy when see their girls . (i mean bias) . Take pictures . All of them . " Eunji unnie and Naeunnie , you also look so wonderful this tonight " Fanboy 2 and 3 praised Eunji and naeun 's fashion .   "Thank you." Namjoo shyly said. "But why are you here? It's very late already." She asked worriedly as she glanced at the three boys. "No, we were just taking a walk and we couldn't help but notice you in your car." One of them explained while he scratched his head nervously. "Why don't you go home already? It's dangerous to be out at night, especially at this hour." Namjoo scolded, concerned for their safety.    "Are there any members there? If we could take a picture then we'll go home. We promise." The boy smiled cheekily as he tried to persuade her. "Okay, fine. But a promise is a promise. Once we take the picture all of you will go home." Namjoo squinted her eyes as she trotted to the car and called out the other two girls. The boys smil