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The Review: 

1. Punctuation, Spelling and Grammar (19.9/20)
- Your writing is beyond magnificent. I felt her despair and how conflicted she is between the events that happened to her. I have no complaints except for this one little sentence: When Xiumin returned. What he found was her tragic death as news, but not her hand. I think it should be: When Xiumin returned, what he found was the tragic news regarding her death. 
Frankly, I do not get why the phrase 'but not her hand' is there as well because that just confused me. As well as that, I don't think the word 'unnie' should be capitalized as well because it plainly translates to 'sister'.

2. Title (4.5/5)

- The title is self-explanatory; the story explains why it is entitled like that as the story progresses. But although it's simple yet direct, it doesn't really push the readers in. 

3. Organization (10/10)

- You have no mistakes in this section. The story's opening, the way that it transitions from each of the events, and the use of figurative language here and there, are all brilliant. 

4. Details (10/10)

- As I have said before, I felt all the emotions in your story. Need I say more? Excellent job in this section!

5. Creativity and Response (6/10)

- When it comes to creativity, I've got to give