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The Review: 

1. Punctuation, Spelling and Grammar (18/20)
- You don't have a lot of mistakes and you have improved from the last time that I have reviewed your story, but I suggest that you do try proofreading your chapters and try to have a vary of words.

2. Title (4/5)

- Somehow, I do see the connection between the title, but since you have not six chapters in and only five of the characters in; I have to say that you really need to fasten the pace a little bit. And I would like to see how the "chosen ones" connect together to form that "power".

3. Organization (7/10)

- As I have said before, you need to fasten your pace a little bit since it's lacking quite a lot regarding what your title states. Though I do like how you incorporate mysteries in the story for the readers to guess. 

4. Details (8/10)

- I really don't have any big complaints but I want to know more about Taeyeon's background since you have said that she was an orphan before. But regardless of where the story is progressing, the six chapters seems to be fair with its details every now and then.

5. Creativity and Response (7/10)

- Respo