♡kpopulzzangforever // -Opposites-
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-Opposites- by kpopulzzangforever
Main Characters: Naeun, Hana (OC), Chanyeol. Key, Biscuit and Ace and more.
Genre/s: Romance
Status: Ongoing
Reviewer: ButterCookies_
The Review:
1. Punctuation, Spelling and Grammar (10/20)
- "Thats quiet a unique name "
- Should be :"That's quite a unique name!"
-The bell rung, "The bell rung, guess that means we have to go then we better get going. Can't miss class." Key said when he heard the bells. He was about to head to the door when Hana grabbed onto his sleve "Wait~"
- Should be: The bell rang, "The bell rang, looks like we better get going. Can't miss class!" Key said right when he heard the school bell ring. He was about to head out when Hana grabbed his sleeve, "Wait!"
-She nodded "OK~"
- Should be: She nodded, "OK!"
- TAKE NOTE : A comma before the speech and no '~' signs
2. Title (3/5)
- The title has a dash, '-' which makes it unique but I think it'll be better if you remove it.
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