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The Review: 

1. Punctuation, Spelling and Grammar (18/20)
- There aren't huge mistakes, but I wanted to see more emotions in your writing; some words don't need to be capitalized as well. Overall, good job in this section.

2. Title (4.5/5)

- The title is quite ironic and is quite catchy which I like, but I wanted to see the title develop into the story more since it doesn't really show that much all throughout. 

3. Organization (6/10)

- The way that you transition from one scene to another bothers me. Personally, I don't think it needs that much space between the paragraphs and I was confused between the memories and the present time since there wasn't an difference to the font that you have used.

4. Details (7/10)

- I like the way that you incorporated how they fell in love with each other and their feelings, but something was just missing from your writing; I was expecting a gush of emotions but I felt nothing. 

5. Creat