♡ bts_kimtaehyung // Blind Heirs
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Blind Heirs by bts_kimtaehyung
Main Characters: Kim YooJung | Baekhyun | Kim WooBin
Genre/s: Romance
Status: Ongoing
Reviewer: ButterCookies_
The Review:
1. Punctuation, Spelling and Grammar (13/20)
- I'll start with your punctuation first, you seem to miss full-stops... therefore, it made me a bit confused. For example in Chapter 1 :
Living like you're not living. Unable to see what others can see. Sadness from inside and outside Being the one who's always being blamed for everything.
Living like you're not living. Unable to see what others can see. Sadness from inside and outside. Being the one who is always being blamed for everything.
-Next, grammar:
"Mianhe, Jung-ah. Appa couldn't stay beside you" you could heard as he started to cries.
"Mianhe, Jung-ah. Appa couldn't stay beside you" you could hear as he started to cry.
2. Title (4/5)
- The first impression was either one of the main leads being blind yet cold-hearted but nope! NOPE! It was something new to me! By Blind Heirs, do you mean that you have more than 1 heir? (Therefore I subtracted marks)
3. Organization (9/10)
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