Title ( 3/5):
-Must be relate and relevant to the story. -> 2 marks     1
-Catchy and can get much attention. ->1 mark     1
-Must be followed by the genre of the story. -> 2 marks     1

I really like your title. It catches my attention, knowing that it’s going to be another version of Dream High, based on the WooU couple. However, by judging on the storyline, it doesn’t seem to really be link to the title much, though the storyline was good, but you could have made some scenes that could also be related to the title, such as school life; that also goes for the genre of the story.

Poster ( 7/10):
-Not messy. -> 1 mark   1
-Relates to story. -> 3 marks   2
-Matches with the theme of story. -> 3 marks   1
-Has the characters that's in the story. -> 1 mark   1
-Catchy and interesting. -> 2 marks   2

I like it how the poster is not messy and is not confuse to look at. It’s theme of the poster, matches with the storyline well, though there could have been more detail to it. It’s very catchy, but I would suggest adding a little bit of background in it. The quote on the poster was excellent! It resembles to the storyline.

Characters ( 4/5):
-Good info used for characters.->1 mark   1
-Info mentioned clearly and easy to understand. ->2 marks   1
-Needed info are given. -> 2 marks   2

Description/Foreword (14 /20):
-Easy to understand. -> 5 marks   4
-Has included the info that's needed and didn't spoil much of the story.  -> 5 marks   3
-Had made readers wanted to continue reading.  -> 5 marks   3
-Good used of info.  -> 5 marks   4

If you are planning to write more stories in the future, I would suggest you to write more in the ‘Description’ than in the ‘Foreword’ section.

Plot (23 /30):
-Didn't copy story from others but base on their own storylines.  -> 5 marks   4
-Has used creative ideas in story.  -> 5 marks   4
-Matches with the theme/mood of story.  -> 5 marks   3
-Good use of characters.  -> 5 marks   4
-Catches readers’ attention and are interesting.  -> 5 marks   4
-Connects to the description.  -> 4 marks   3
-Follows on the story very well.  -> 1 mark   1

Your storyline was based to your own ideas, which is good, however I didn’t give you full marks because the scene where Jason had the iPod, resembles to the scene that Taecyeon and Suzy has spent in the real drama. The storyline was interesting, and by reading the comments you have from readers, the story seem to be having a lot of attention. Good job at that point! J
In my opinion, the description and storyline is kind of different with each other. They don’t really resemble with each other. What I mean is that some of the parts from the description matched perfectly to the story, but also, there are some that don’t!  Other than that, I really like it how the story flows.

Here are some examples from your piece of work
Chapter 3:
… they were aiming for Pil Suk I realise.
Correction: …they were aiming for Pil Suk I realised.
Why: Past tense.

…Every time when we meet, we normally argue more than a normal conversation.
Correction: …Every time when we meet, we normally argue more than getting to have a normal conversation.
Why: You need to state the sentence clearly!

…I have friends there and I contact with them with social network.
Correction: … I have friends there, and I contact with them by social network.
Why: Used of words.

Chapter 7:
… After I finished within I have waste an hour on, as I was passing the Lady’s Formal store, I saw a familiar face.
Correction: … After I finished with what I have wasted an hour on. As I was passing the lady’s formal store, I saw a familiar face.
Why: Used of words, tenses and grammar error! Remember that when a word starts with a capital letter, it either means that it’s the starting word or a NOUN/NAME!

…She took a deep breath and face me.
Correction: She took a deep breath and faced me.
Why: Tense.

… The people in the stored realise that we were noisy so we tried to keep down our noise level down since it’s a royal place.
Correction: The people in the store realised that we were noisy, so we tried to keep down our noise level, since it’s a royal place.
Why: Grammar error?

There are more along the way! Though the story was good! ><

Spelling/Grammar ( 13/20):
-Has correct spellings and no error. -> 10 marks   7
-Good used of adjectives. -> 10 marks   6

Overall enjoyment (8 /10):
-Always having the reader’s attention. -> 5 marks    4
-Story isn't boring but very interesting to read. -> 5 marks   4

Your story is great! I hope to hear more from you in the future! Update soon! :D

Total Marks (72/100): 
Effort: B