Fanfic Title: Hello~, My Foreign Juliette~
Description: What if three Amercan high schoolers go to South Korea? Who know what they'll have to deal with especially since on one of them is Dominican, Irish and Chinese! They've tried loving Western Guys but they were to stupid and ertive.
SHINee on the other hand can get almost any girl to love them. But that isn't what they want. What if they want a girl who can be a fangirl and not treat them like Gods but like regular human?! Is that even possible?!
If they were to meet the two girls, would they brush them off like a regular idol or find interest in their differences?
Who knows if they could actually become 2 foreign Juliettes? Will the boy be able to turn another guy gay?
Entertainment level: 70%
Reviewer: BubblesSweet

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Title- 4/5

I’ve never heard of the title before and I guess I can give you points for the originality. I don’t exactly know if it’s eye catching though.

Graphics/Posters—5/5
The poster is nicely made and suitable. No points will be deducted.

Foreward/Description-5/10
I like how you made the description. It’s simple and easy to understand. It made me felt the story is interesting and I wanted to read more. Good job. Though there are some spelling errors in your foreword. And I think it’s just typos.
Overall, it’s all good.

Originality—8/10
It was pretty original to me since I’ve never encountered a story such as yours. Though I have read some about fanmeetings,  going to South Korea and such.

Plot--10/20
Your plot made me confused at so many scenes and chapters. But then it's your plot, I can't do anything to change that except that I advise you to read back your fanfic and imagine yourself as the reader. How they feel when they read it and whether they understand it or not.

Grammar/Spelling—20/30

Foreword:
Instead of: ….. 30 minutes tops since very few peoplewhere there.
Correct it with: …… 30 minutes tops since very few people were there.
Instead of: I’ve seen what people said about K-pop and I’m emotional not prepared to listen to antis…….
Correct it with: I’ve seen what people said about K-pop and I’m emotionally not prepared to listen to antis…….
Instead of: I gave a flight attendant my ticket….
Correct it with: I gave the flight attendant my ticket….
Instead of: I toke out 2 mangas, my I-Pod……..
Correct it with: I took out two mangas, my iPod……..

Chapter 8:

Instead of: A couples day later……..
Replace it with: A couple of days later……

 Instead of: CoCo and I dung into the food…..
Replace it with: Coco and I dug into the food..../ Coco and I began to dug in.....

Other chapters have typos and wrong grammar too but there’s a lot to list down. Do you use Microsoft Word? If you don’t, then I advise you to use it.

Flow—5/10
I can't judge untill the end since you haven't completed the fanfic yet. But so far, I sometimes get mixed up with the characters, lol. And sometimes I get really confused of where they were and what they were doing. They went to the Noraebang room after they were at the arcade? Why didn’t you just put the Arcade first before Noraebang? Lol. The point is, I got confused. I also advise you to not make their meeting too long. What I meant was that, at chapter 10(maybe) is her first meeting with Jonghyun? I think there’s too many chapters until they finally meet. But then, it’s highly up to you of how you want your plot to be(:

Neatness-4/5
It was pretty neat.

Extra- 4/5
I give you 4 points for this because of how you made the story seemed interesting.

Total: 65/100points (B)

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Don't give up in writting~ You're a great author with many ideas and I'm sure, you'll improve a lot! Thank you for requesting from our shop and I hope you don't feel offended by my opinions. But then again, it's my opinions. You can go to other shops and ask for theirs and that way you may improve more! x) Anyway, don't forget to credit! ^^