Fanfic Title: My Untouchable Prince
Description: Its not easy to fall in love with a prince, unknowingly, at first sight, who's already been occupied by not any other girl but your Best friend.
Entertainment level: 50%
Reviewer: BubblesSweet

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Title—4/5
I like the title, it drew me in.

Graphics/Posters—4/5
I really like your graphics, it’s pretty! Haha.

Foreword/Description-6/10
The description didn’t really give out too much about the story which is a good thing. The foreword has some errors which is stated in the Grammar/Spelling section of the rubric.

Originality—5/10
It’s not exactly original since I’ve read stories such as yours. You lose points there.

Plot—17/20
The plotting is great! But at some points, it became confusing.

Grammar/Spelling—15/30
In the foreword:

….She thought its fate and they are ment to be until later Kiseop..
Correct it to: She thought its fate and they are meant to be until later Kiseop……

……react when she know about it?
Correct it to: react when she knows about it?

Chapter 1:
I washed up, dressed…
Correct it to: I washed up, got dressed…

I made you beacon and toasts
Correct to: I made you bacon and toast

….so fresh at the month of May.
Correct it to: ….so fresh in the month of May.

I flew of my bicycle…
Correct it to: I flew off my bicycle

Chapter 2:

I could smell a sweet sent ….
Correct it to: I could smell a sweet scent …

"Get on the car, can you?"
Correct it to: "Can you get in the car?”

 "I mean the bleeding from your bruises"
Correct it to:  "I mean the bleeding from your cuts " *bruises can’t bleed.

I’m sorry, but there were many grammar errors and such. There were many detectable spelling mistakes as well but they were too many to list down. I suggest you use Microsoft Word or other types of programs that detects spelling error or grammatical errors..

Flow—8/10

Neatness-3/5
To me, the size of the font was a little off. Don’t make your fonts too big because readers will easily lose interest. And the colour of the font, do keep it to black only or probably dark grey. It hurts my eyes.

Extra- 2

Total:  64/100points

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I'm sorry if I was too harsh but I was just stating my most honest opinion. If you'd like, I can be your Beta Reader (: Anyway, thank you for requesting from our shop and don't forget to credit the reviewer and the shop. We hope to review a story from you soon ^^ Don't give up in writing! You have many ideas and I'm sure you can improve quickly.