Review for I Choose To Love You (by DoodleDarryl)
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Fanfic Title: I Choose To Love You
Description: He loves her very much. But what will you do when the girl you love didn't accept your confession? Will you still love her after all she has done to you?
Entertainment level: 80%
Reviewer: Turnbaek
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Title- 4/5
Will definitely catch my eye if I were to see your fanfic. Goob job!
Graphics/Posters- 5/5
I totally love your poster because it gives off a very sad feel and how the clock symbolizes that time is running out. Your background totally matches your poster, so full marks.
Foreword/Description- 6/10
Your story is supposed to be in the angst category, so what's with the bright pink and blue? Instead of putting bright colours, maybe you should put dark colours such as dark grey etc. And to say honestly, your description was a little bit cliché.
You added a brief description of the characters which I thought was a job well done. But again, since your story isn't a happy one, the characters in your pictures shouldn't be smiling, and there shouldn't be any colours.
Other than that, your description made me want to rush in and read the story so well done. I love the fonts used too.
Originality- 8/10
Honestly, I have read many fics when the OC has a disease but keeps it to herself so she wouldn't hurt anyone. But you added some twists to it and this makes your oneshot more unique.
Plot- 20/20
Okay I spent ten whole minutes here, thinking of what to type. But really, there's nothing to say about your plot so well done. ^^
Grammar/Spelling- 25/30
There are a few grammar errors here and there, for example :
Example 1:
Hayoung is one of the queenka in school.
Corrected:
Hayoung was one of the queenkas in school.
Example 2:
She's the crush of Jo Kwangmin, a nerd guy.
Corrected:
She's the crush of Jo Kwangmin, a nerdy guy.
Example 3:
Kwangmin immediately hide the picture.
Corrected:
Kwangmin immediately hid the picture.
There are quite a few grammar errors in your oneshot, but I'll leave it to you to change them if you want. Please refrain from typing emoticons in your story too.
Flow- 10/10
Since it's a oneshot, I can't really say anything about the flow.
Neatness- 3/5
Not very neat. Maybe you should use a single dialogue for every paragraph because it's really cramped up.
Extra- 4/5
I enjoyed your oneshot alot, and I feel really sorry for Kwangmin but little Youngmin is so cute.
Total- 85/100
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