Fanfic Title: Merry Go Round
Description: There will always be something new to discover in high school. Meeting best friends. Uncovering talents. Crushing on first love. Heartbreak. Planning the future. Follow Park Min Ra as she started her bitter sweet days of high school.
Entertainment level: 85%
Reviewer: BubblesSweet

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Title—4/5
I like how you made a little ‘explanation’ about the title in a summary of the story.

Graphics/Posters—4/5
It’s nicely done and it matched to the genre of your story. Plus, it's from one of my favourite request shops c:

Foreword/Description-7/10
The foreword is nicely done. Perfect. It didn’t give out too much about your story but at the same time, I think I know what’s going to happen in the end. Most probably they would eventually fall in love? Maybe? Though in the description: “Real friend wouldn’t leave because of some superficial stuff……..” You wrote it wrongly or it was just a typo but the sentence should be: “A real friend wouldn’t leave because of some superficial stuff……..” And another: “Ya! Who need talent?! Music is not about……..” It should be written as so, “Ya! Who needs talent?! Music is not about……..”

“She hasn’t gotten much friend, much less a……………”
“She hasn’t gotten much friends, much less a……………”

Originality—8/10
High school life is very common, though I do the same, but you lose marks for originality. But then, this story including a band, which made me very interested! Good job. You added a little twist there. I would never have guest.

Plot—18/20
Though I can't judge much since you're just at chapter 3, it was fine up to there.

Grammar/Spelling—25/30
In chapter 1: I spotted sentences in some dialogs,

“Yo! Why so in hurry?”
It should be, “Yo! Why are you in a hurry?” or “Yo! Why such a hurry?”

“Have you thought of joining any club?”
“Have you thought of joining any clubs?”

“Why you asked if I know that he was taken?”
“Why did you ask whether I knew he was taken?”

Chapter 3: “The result has already been out since the morning!.......”
“The result has already been out since this morning!.......”

There are more mistakes and errors, though I have to advise you to read back your chapters as some errors are obvious. If you don’t spot any of them or maybe some, then maybe you should get a beta reader (: I also noticed you missed the ‘s’ behind a countable. Such as the clubs in the school, there aren’t only one club but many. So do keep an eye on that. Other than that, your grammar is fantastic yet I spotted many mistakes.

Flow—8/10
I love how you gave a little twist in chapter 3, haha. The flow is going on great and I like how you made the chapters very long. It gave me more interest. But at the same time, do make sure your chapters are interesting to keep your readers interested. So, good job! Keep it up. Maybe give more twists in the future? But not too much.

Neatness-4/5
It was very neat.

Extra-5/ 5
I think I’m going to keep supporting this fanfic and that shows you how much I liked it. Other than that, I’m a hard core exotic so, lol.

Total: 83/100 points

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