Hiatus

Hello,

As you may notice my last update for this story is for a while ago and It's mostly because I didn't get a chance to write it, because of the things like -firstly-my high school and even after I wanted to give myself a holiday and enjoy my life in the summer.

But there is also another reason that I'm going to keep this story that way and buy a little time for it and myself.

It is my very first experience and I'm not that good in writing and describing things (actually didn't get it hard on myself) but as I started to re-read the story again and tried to fix my mistakes they were too many so I decide I want time to rewrite it again also I want to work a little on the story line too.

At first I'd thought the story line was acceptable but as I started to write, it was getting more and more illogical and took me a while to fix it when ever I wanted to write. So I want to make an acceptable story line before start to write the story again.

It may get a little while and a little help so I want to apologize for my mistakes and absentes and also ask for more time to work on it.

Thank you for your support.

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pjnn24 #1 Sep 22, 2018 06:31:37

I'm liking this~ Keep it up!!

Hanbyeul #2 Sep 17, 2018 22:42:46

Hey, you mentioned wanting people to comment to help you improve I'm just going to give you a rewritten version of this foreword to for it
to make more sense; I can help you with the editing process of your story further on if you would like I'll also give you an explanation of my edits and changes:

Yujin is the only child that her father had. Her grandfather wants to give her everything, but there are some conditions.

1) Only a man can have ownership of her grandfather's company.

2) She has to work until she marries.

She hates both of these rules, but what can she do? He is her grandfather, her only family after her parents' passing.

The only thing she remembers from her childhood is that her grandfather said that he loves her; that he will protect her from everything even her parents. Yujin used to see her mother in her dreams, but that's all she can remember of her mother. After her grandfather said those words, she stopped appearing to her. Yujin can no longer remember much about her parents.

Yujin's aunt is the current owner of the company with her husband until Yujin is able to marry. Jinhyun, the son of Yujin's aunt, once confessed that he has feelings for Yujin, even loves her. Yujin turned him down due to them being family. The five of them live together.

Now I'll explain what I changed and why:

The grammar at places was all over the place and difficult to read; I did my best to make changes that make it simpler to read and easier to follow. The reason I changed the point of view is that it's just the foreword and it is just an introduction to the character. It's a little weird for her to say something like that to herself, isn't it? When you write in first person your audience is put into the shoes of the character so explaining things that way makes it awkward and hard to get a feel of. I hope this is helpful and I'm always willing to help! Welcome to AFF you mentioned this is your first time writing on here!