The Breath

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The Breath

By: gakistalGakistal

Reviewer: Fantabulously

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1. Title - 10/10 -

I hope this doesn't sound wrong but, your title, "The Breath" makes me wonder if a person's breath smelt bad or something. But that was only at first though, so don't worry!

After reading the description and the rest of your media, I understood why it was titled that. :P

2. Description/Forward - 7/10 -

Your description was adequate. There're some errors with your dialouge and the quote from Winnie the Pooh was a bit confusing but it I understand the theme and all, so no biggie. :P

The description didn't really describe much, sadly. Taeyeon might be leaving, but it got me wondering, were was this "final home", was it heaven or what? That makes the reader want to read it though, good job on that small cliffhanger. ;)

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