eleven days 

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eleven days

By: karmachameleon

Reviewer: xXxmani923xXx

★ ★ ★ ★ ★

1. Title - 9/10 -

The title fits well with the storyline without giving anything away but the title doesn't stand out. I would maybe suggest thinking of a new title or adding onto it to make your story sound more unique.
 

2. Description/Forward - 10/10 -

There is a significant amount of information in your description/foreword- not too detailed and not too little info. The description included a well thought out plot line to use to lure your readers which was done well without giving away any important details from the story. You only gave enough for the reader's to get an idea if the plot sounds interesting or not.
 

3. Character Develpment/ Showcasting - 9/10 -

There was a good amount of character development, though I felt the connection between YiXing and Byul was rather rushed. I didn't quite understand why YiXing cared for Byul's well-being when she was getting harrassed by a few guys at a cafe. Was it because she was a girl getting harrassed and he saw it and wanted to help or felt guilty about the picture leakage and if so, why did he feel so guilty? I would maybe go back and try to clarify a little better ^^