what do you choose

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What do you choose

By: blanderina

Reviewer: comebackhomeXOXO

★ ★ ★ ★ 

1. Title - 7/10 -

In terms of direct linkage to the plot, I'd rather you title be 'Who'. However, it'd be overly cliche that way so let's just stick to your current title. It'd be perfect in ways only you and readers(me included XD) could understand.
 

2. Description/Forward - 7/10 -

It was good, overally speaking, in a sense that I could foresee what I am about to view next. Nevertheless, the lack of suspense in it degraded your marks for this one. ( Its kinda like, I already know 3/4 of the story, since one shots are supposingly short, don't expose the story just like that.)
 

3. Character Develpment/ Showcasting - 7/10 -

Mira, Jongin and Baekhyun. Who are they? Where are they from? What did they do except talk when they met up? Well, I can definately relate to mira with enough basic knowledge about her. Jong