white lights

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white lights

By: jongupper

Reviewer: Yeoniebb42

★ ★ ★ ★ ★

1. Title - 8/10 -

Given the ending, you chose this title pretty well. It’s a little too forgettable, honestly speaking, but it does fit the story to a certain degree.

2. Description/Foreword - 9/10 -

I quite like the description and foreword you’ve got here. It’s well-organised, it’s tidy and the description is brief yet informative. It didn’t really have that wow factor to attract my attention but nonetheless, I would consider it satisfactory.

3. Character Develpment/ Showcasing - 9.5/10 -

I like how you would go back and forth describing Amber and Soojung because this gave me a really good glimpse of their individual personalities and allowed us readers to draw comparisons between the two. However, I often had difficulties distinguishing whom you were describing at certain points due to the similar pronouns, tiny font and lack of adequate spacing. Besides, I had to think for a moment before I realised that you were referring to Amber when you said “the older of the two”. I only knew this because I know that Krystal is the youngest member of f(x) so for those whom did not know this fact and happened to stumble across your story, they would most definit