sungmin-erella

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Sungmin-erella

By: Sungjewel

Reviewer: xXxmani923xXx

★ ★ ★ ★ ★

1. Title - 9/10 -

The title is very catchy but isn't very original. However, the title does suit well with the plot even though it sort of gives the plot away (the title reveals the plot). 

2. Description/Forward - 8/10 -

Your description/foreward is way to detailed. It's never good to give away too much information about the characters in your description. If I were you, I would get rid of the entire character description under both Kyuhyun and Sungmin and focus more on other details, for example, for Sungmin, it was okay to type "Role: Cinderella", though you have to keep in mind it gives away the entire plot. You can include other info like Age, rich/poor, etc.

3. Character Develpment/ Showcasting - 9/10-

There is character development throughout your story, though you've basically given the step-brothers the same attitude he step-sisters in Cinderella had.

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