We got Married [2SHINee1 edition]
By: BBVIP21BlackJack
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/97469/we-got-married-2shinee1-edition-2ne1-bom-dara-jonghyun-onew-shinee-2ne1cl

Title: (3.5/5)

It was simple and straight-forward. If people, who watches this, would know what “We got Married” will be about. It was a creative way of combining 2NE1 and SHINee to 2SHINee1. It didn’t catch my attention till I saw 2SHINee1.

Appearance: (4/5)

It was good. It matches well with your theme for this story.

Description/Foreword: (5/15)

It was short and simple but it is over-rated. The foreword, you can add a character chart.

Plot/Originality: (2.5/10)

Well on AFF, there are many WGM, Hello Baby etc. Let your imagination runs wild. The thing that was different was having from one couple to four but that was all.

Characters: (2/5)

To me, I couldn’t grasp the characters’ personality. They weren’t vivid enough.

Flow: (4/10)

Uhm, I am lost. I was like Chapter 2 already? You shouldn’t add photos since it disrupts the flow of the story. It was okay to have different pov’s but in this particular type of family, I would recommend to have it in third-person rather than different pov’s like usual.

Grammar and Spelling: (15/20)

Your grammar isn’t bad; you just need to use different vocabulary. Don’t end a sentence with “...” or use more or less dots. It has to be three and three it is.

Overall Enjoyment: (10/20)

I didn’t really enjoy it since I have seen many fanfics that is related to WGM.

Total: (46/90) 51%

Comments: I guess you should let you imagination run wild. Rather than putting pictures, use the power of words. Add more details when you describe things. Don’t feel discourage.