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Between You amd My Teacher
Written by: baesueji
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/96973/between-you-my-teacher-korean-krystal-minho-suzy-tackey-taemin-taezy
Title: (1/5)
It reveals a load of the story. Make the title more creative.
Appearance: (2/5)
The poster, it isn't captivative. It needs to be more eye-catching. The blending is good though.
Description/Foreword: (6/15)
Okay, for me, I think that these type of description reveals quite a bit of the story, it seems more like characters description, no offense. I think that it should be more interesting and creative. When reading, they would want to read more. I like how you put a character chart, which shows the reader a quick glimpse of the characters.
Plot/Originality: (4/10)
To me it's quite common, expect just a little change such as the setting. It is in Osaka and Seoul. I think you shouldn't focus on one perspective, explore.
Characters: (2/5)
I can't imagine the characters. To me, it's too little details.
Flow: (4/10)
It's a bit confusing because of the povs. I couldn't really catch up with what it is going on. Furthermore, it was too little details. I have a weak eye so the constant change of povs along with the colors highlighted is too blinding and cause a slight headache. I think the pace is alright aside from those.
Grammar and Spelling: (8/20)
There were quite a few grammatical errors and basic errors. When writing dialogues, you use "this" rather than 'this.' Use the commas! For more details, check out this site. Captialization is required when you start a sentence, even if it is a dialogue.
Ex.1: But I admire her beauty and i never feel like this before.
Correction(s): But I admire her beauty, I never feel like this before.
Overall Enjoyment: (-/20)
I didn't enjoy. It didn't really catch my attention in any ways as I read through this fanfic.
Total: (27/90) 30%
Comments: I know it seems harsh. Don't be discourage because of it. There are more room for further improvement. I think you should ask someone to recheck your work before posting. Keep one font and font size so people don't get confuse. Other than that, don't give up.
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