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Magically in Love [one-shot collection]
By: Emerson
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/105878/magically-in-love-oneshot-collections-apply-idols-kpop-oneshot-request-romance-you
Title: (3/5)
The title wasn’t catchy. Since this was a one-shot collection, I didn’t find it catchy. It does give out what this fanfic is about which is good.
Appearance: (1/5)
I mean it’s a one-shot collection but you can still add a poster to make it catchy. I know some really good shop if you want me to recommend some.
Description/Foreword: (12/15)
I got to say, it catches my attention, especially the last part. It gives off a sense of questioning. It was also short and simple. Love how you wrote in the foreword, the chapter titles.
Plot/Originality: (7/10)
It was good. You developed it well and it is not the most, absolute original but it’s more like a rare type.
Characters: (5/5)
I got to say, I was able to imagine how the characters were like. It was also very detailed.
Flow: (10/10)
It was at the right pace in my opinion.
Grammar and Spelling: (10/20)
There were few grammatical errors here and there. Some of them were repeated. In the other fanfic of yours I reviewed, I think I also mention about the commas and put it where it is necessary.
Ex.1: Just the two of them.
Correction(s): Just the two of them,
Don’t end a sentence with “...” or use two dots. Three dots is the exact dots. No more or no less than three.
Ex.2: ...and he’s like that song called Message.
Correction(s): ...and he’s like that song called, “Message.”
Besides that, it was mostly repeated.
Overall Enjoyment: (20/20)
I got to say, I love reading one-shot. I think this was a good one-shot collection.
Total: (68/90) 76%
Comments: You have improved a lot. I think I need to request one. The only downfall was the poster. Keep up the good work and don’t feel discouraged.
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